Firstly, I want to say the melody of this is perfect, especially with your voice. It's very dark, but not overly dramatic. I love it and it's so calming.
Secondly, I love the lyrics. The rhyme scheme is unusual, but it goes so well. I love it so much.
The metaphors are amazing and you used great figurative language!
Thirdly, I usually like doing critiques so it's not just generic, but I'm not able to think of something I'd say you need to do better. I love this!
Brilliant. This really works in ways my songs seem to not. Very cool. I just realized all my good descriptive words seem boring. Anyway, I like your song.
My name is Oliver Queen. For five years I was stranded on an island with only one goal: survive. Now, I will fulfill my father's dying wish: to use the list of names he left me, and bring down those who are poisoning my city. To do this, I must become someone else. I must become something else.
I love how the lyrics contrast with the melody and overall tone of the music. The lyrics are poignant and sharp and dare I say piercing, but the melody is soft spoken and beautiful and it works so well.
I personally love the first three stanzas and I feel the introduction of "him" toward the end takes away from the feeling of "I will pierce the storm". Is this song about independence or about turning to another lover?
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