hopefully, I changed the things that were confusing. Thanks so much for your reviews! It really helps to have lots of awesome feedback.
The trees do sing, he told me.
I didn't believe him but, I listened.
The wind flowed through the trees,
And it hummed a soft tune.
Then all the birds followed with small chirps.
The light of the sun beamed through the leaves,
As sweet creatures came out to share their song.
Foxes, bears, insects of all kinds.
Every moment was an orchestra, filled with calls and whistles.
A moment of silence would be frightening,
But a gust of wind would start the song once more.
I turned to him and said,
The forest sings. He smiled.
hopefully, I changed the things that were confusing. Thanks so much for your reviews! It really helps to have lots of awesome feedback.
I see you're fairly new here, so welcome to the YWS! 
I hope you enjoy your time.
This is a lovely poem. I like the imagery of the wind flowing through the trees, the lights of the sun beaming through the leaves and especially that comparison to an orchestra. You've captured that simple yet still so profound nature of the forest. And ah yes, that ending line was my favorite. All of the forest sings!
It's a shorter poem, and I think you could give us some more descriptions of the forest, maybe tell us about the "sweet creatures". But, of course, it's perfectly fine if you don't, because this poem is beautiful as it stands.
The lights of the sun beamed through the leaves,
The forest sings, he smiled.
Hi there!
This reminds me of the kinds of poems I wrote when I started writing poetry - I wrote a lot about nature. I don't write as much poetry now, but I have a couple thoughts on this for you today.
I like the near-repetition of the first and last lines.
The trees do sing, he told me.
I turned to him and said,
The forest sings, he smiled.
A moment of silence was frightening.
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