Heya!
Zombies, zombies, I don't know if I like them or not. I do know I like your main character though. Many people (even in movies) like to have their MC a trained soldier who shoots stuff for a living, which is why I like the reality of your character, unsure of the gun (s)he's holding, doing it all for his step-brother.
You have a solid voice in your writing, confident and capable. Your word choice is great, I like the eerieness of (especially) the ending. Only one place where it cracked in my opinion: using "juicy" to describe a zombie's feral hunger for the MC's flesh seems out of place with the rest of the rather dark piece. I suggest switching that up into something less... well, for the lack of a better word, cartoonish.
Overall, I like your swing at the zombie-thing, might even tune in later to see how it's going even though I'm not quite that into these. Keep writing, for sure!
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