So I'm not really sure who's speaking here, but that might only be because I showed up so late in the story. It was Raven in the prior chapter, and I know she was with the angels for a long time, so it would make sense that it's her again...except that the narrator here is presented as having been raised by Lyrel, so probably not. Also if Lyrel's dead, this has to be in the future.
On that note, my first impression upon reading this chapter was "Nope never mind I can't do italics" (I know, after the nice things I said about them in the last chapter), but now I'm wondering if maybe it's because this is another vision and Lyrel's not actually dead yet but might be soon.
So never mind about the italics.
But I'm still confused on the narrator. If this is in fact a different narrator - if you switch back and forth between multiple first-person perspectives throughout the story - it might help readers keep track if you title each chapter with the narrator's name.
Although if that's the case then probably you can also leave off the italics, if this is just a different narrator rather than a vision.
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