Hey there dude.
Doing my revmo sweep for poems without proper reviews.
First thing, the color.
Personally I am not a fan of having the text colored in works, in a similar manner to how I don’t like pictures being place in there. It’s just all very distracting to me as a reader. I’m now more focused on the screaming red color than I am on the actual content? You don’t reallt want that to be consistently happening.
The capitalization and punctuation combo isn’t very consistent. This poem has a lot of issues that are rather minor things individually but once combined, they’re painful for the reader. I like how you didn’t originally fall feign to the idea that every line needs a cap. I appreciate it when poets remember that’s not necessary.
But by the last stanza, this idea has turned and not for the better.
I’d think about consistency as a cosmetic issue in the future for this poem.
Then there’s the flow. Luckily the other reviewers have heavily covered it. But for a further explanation, resources has so many articles on the subject.
The idea is not great and the execution is plain, but with the right amount of work, any poem can turn into a great poem.
- Lizz
Points: 650
Reviews: 766
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