Young Writers Society

I liked this poem.It was very heartfelt and lovely.It’s true,too.You can find your friends in the most unexpected places.Keep them close to you.Don’t lose sight of who your friends are.That’s an important life lesson.This poem did cheer me up.It could cheer anyone up! Great job on it! I hope that you have a lovely and amazing day and night.

This is amazing for a beginner I have a poem too as I am a beginner as well. It is called "Spiders". Friends really are important, and they do make the world go around and around again. You can consider thems the siblings or sibling you never had before. I treat my best friend Like we are sisters, instead of saying "Bye" we say "Love you" or "Love you, sis" because we are that close to each other. You love them closely and never want to let them go, My friend is was in a mental hospital for depression, and I'm sad because she cannot have her phone so we can't text and can't call each other. All I can do is wish for the best and think back to all the good times we shared with each other.

Hey there VioletFantasy! Tuck here with a review for you.

I really like the topic you picked! Friendship is an excellent topic full of potential to explore, and there are many opportunities for positive metaphors, similes, and personification. I also like the way that you established rhythm through stanzas and lines that were, for the most part, a consistent length. This is a great starting point as a poet, and I'm going to jump into some constructive criticism to give you some idea for how to edit!

First, I noticed that you didn't utilize much figurative language. One of my favorite quotes about poetry is "Tell the truth, but tell it slant". Along this same lines, you spend a lot of time telling us about how good and strong friendship is. Rather than telling the reader something factually, provide small insights into the lives of some friends to show how it enriches their individual lives. Working in some similes, metaphors, personification, and other metaphorical language will engage the reader more than just "Friends are good".

I also think you should rethink your use of the repetition. This could be because I didn't feel a strong emotional connection to the phrase that was repeated, but it felt redundant rather than powerful and moving. That being said, it was a good way to maintain a sense of flow and structure, so perhaps consider keeping it and just giving some more impact to the repeated phrase.

I think that should be a good starting point for you! I hope these pointers are helpful for you and not too overwhelming. I want to reiterate that this is a great foundation for a poem, just needs a bit of touching up in some places. If you have any questions please feel free to reach out.

Best,
Tuck

Aw, this is such a cute poem! For some reason, I found these lines really funny

you can find them in the most unexpected places

in school, the grocery store, or even the library