Young Writers Society

Momo is here to review!

First, I'm so so so so so sorry that these reviews are late! I'll try to get to your other one later.

This is really good! It's short, simple, and it gets to the point really quickly. I always love your poetry, because the rhyming is beautiful, and the description is the absolute best! Just one thing I wanted to point out.

Childhood memories filling my head,

dark, hidden horrors that I remember no more

Hi/ Namaste
It was a really beautiful poem about our past and childhood. I can say that you focused on those things that we do want to forget, but they are still left somewhere inside.
I think I really understood well the part where you mentioned that some of those memories are like those which we don't want anyone to know, which would change others perception about us, of what we are afraid or ashemed of.
The theme of the poem is really good and is expressed beautifully in a rhythms that made me to like your poem really much.
Thankyou/ Dhanyavad

Wow, the rhyming scheme is really nice, though I felt it broke a little as the second stanza began. This was a really mysterious piece of writing you wrote, but I really enjoyed reading it.

dreams and horrors filling my mind

despite my memories posing a threat

Well, I’m no expert in these things, and please ignore this if it’s wrong or anything, but I think it should have it should instead be:

dreams and horrors filling my mind, ( the comma)
despite my memories posing a threat. (The full stop)

I didn’t see any more grammar mistakes, but you should improve the rhyming scheme in the second stanza. I hope you’re not offended. Keep writing. Bye.