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Persuasive essay on Recycling

by TheBlueCat


Picture this: city streets covered in slimy, sticky junk with nowhere to walk. Skyscrapers, which you can't see because of the choking, gray smog, covered in filthy plastic bags. Scummy, sluggish black water oozing past, carrying uncountable amounts if trash. Trash piled sky-high and not a living thing anywhere in sight; not even a weed because of the tragically unlivable conditions. Not a pleasant picture, right? This is the exactly why we need to recycle. Recycling is a crucial part of caring for the environment because it reduces pollution, saves renewable and nonrenewable materials, and saves energy.

How might recycling reduce pollution? Well, if you throw away a recyclable item, let's say a plastic bottle, it will end up in the landfill. Say it rains, and the bottle get washed away onto the streets. Now it's just pollution, even though you didn't litter mindfully. If you recycle that plastic bottle instead, it will be taken to a recycling plant, melted down, and pressed into a new item, from another plastic bottle to a t-shirt! This way, recycling can also reuse old materials, and reduce the amount of pollution. UCO even gives statistics on how much pollution is reduced! "Manufacturing products from recycled paper reduces water pollution by 35% and air pollutants by 73%. Using recycled steel in manufacturing can cut down on 76% of the water pollutants, 86% of the air pollutants, and 97% of the mining wastes that would normally be produced. Using recycled glass can reduce the water used by manufacturing by 50%, cut air pollution by 20%, and reduce mining wastes by 80%" (“UCO: Recycling”).

Recycling also helps to save renewable and nonrenewable materials. Plastic is made from chemicals and is made by using oil, coal or natural gas; all of which are nonrenewable. We need to not be throwing around our nonrenewable materials carelessly; it takes millions of years for them to reproduce! We even need to be careful with our renewable materials; trees are vital to our survival and we have to make sure there are enough. If we used all of our trees for paper, we would surely die, as tree provide our main source of oxygen. Planting more trees is a way to avoid this, as is recycling! If we recycle our used paper, they can be shredded down to create more paper instead of cutting down more trees.

Energy is also saved when recycling. It takes energy, usually in the form of coal, oil, or natural gas, to make most of the products we use every day, and a lot of those items are recyclable. If we recycle, we still use some energy to transform the material into something new, but significantly less than making a brand new product. All it takes is taking a few extra moments to place the recyclable item in the correct bin, and you have made a world of difference for our planet! But it doesn’t save my energy, you say. Well, it may not, but it only takes a few extra moments out of your day to make a huge difference. Caring for Environment says "If just a few hundred people took the time during their day to place the right article of trash into the appropriate receptacle then our future will look much brighter, e.g. cleaner water for drinking and bathing, and fitter plants and animals" (“Caring for Environment: Recycling”).

To conclude, recycling is a crucial part of caring for the environment because it reduces pollution, saves renewable and nonrenewable materials, and saves energy. Just a few extra minutes to stop and put a recyclable in the correct bin can save the environment from pollutants and depletion of natural resources. You can make all the difference by just recycling! So go, see how much of a difference recycling can make and spread the word about the need to recycle. Those few extra minutes can be your difference to the health of the planet.

Works Cited

“A New Revolution in Recycling.” Caring for Environment: Recycling . n.d. Web. 27 January 2018.

www.caringforenvironment.com/recycling/.

“Recycling.” UCO: Recycling. n.d. Web. 27 January 2018. sites.uco.edu/administration/green/recycling/index.asp.


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Hi there TheBlueCat! I should be reviewing your poem you asked to be reviewed in my WRFF thread, but here I am procrastinating. I saw this and I just had to review it. Hopefully my feedback will help! Usually, I don't see many essays on here or they don't seem to interest me, so I'm glad I finally found one to test the reviewing waters with. I write essays all the time in school and wanted to see your take on writing an essay.

For the most part, in your first introductory paragraph, you have good examples and well thought out imagery for people to see in your mind. I have one thing to say about your verb use of the word 'covered' in two sentences -- you used 'covered' to describe the trash and gunk all around a city in two sentences in a row:

Picture this: city streets covered in slimy, sticky junk with nowhere to walk. Skyscrapers, which you can't see because of the choking, gray smog, covered in filthy plastic bags.

You have lots of options of verbs and I suggest switching one for an alternative word! This really isn't a big deal but I think it helps with uniqueness between sentences and then it feels like it is less repetitive.

One big suggestion would be to stay away from unnecessary words, like 'also'. You used 'also' in two of your claims in your body paragraphs for energy and saving materials. It's one of those words that sneak into our sentences when we want to be more straightforward -- I'm guilty of this too! If you read it out loud to yourself without 'also' you will find that it works just as fine, if not, even better. If having no filler word like 'also' doesn't work for you, I suggest using something like 'too' at the end of your sentence. For example:

Energy is saved when recycling, too.

This way it feels like you're not making a list with all of those 'also's.

I know this already has been turned in and graded (congrats on the 25, by the way) but I do have a suggestion for future essay writing, or just this essay specifically. You're promoting the action of recycling, but it might be nice to be introduced to alternative products that are originally made of non-renewable materials. For example, if water bottles are made of plastic, and are non-renewable, what can a person buy that will help save energy and help recycle? Boxed water might be a potential answer, as will buying a permanent water bottle made out of a non-plastic material. Hopefully that made sense! Giving examples of everyday items people can start using will help promote recycling even more.

I'm not sure how your teacher/school has you format essays, but I have something I want to point out. I noticed how you have 'to conclude,' as a boost in the beginning of your conclusion. I'm personally not a fan of those types of beginnings, but I think it really depends on the writer. It just feels like a basic essay writing format, and unnecessary. Like, there is probably an alternative than practically telling the reader that it's the conclusion. In some situations, it flows and works well, but your topic is very informational and sophisticated, that it could work with a more well-developed concluding sentence.

Let's talk about the rest of the conclusion a little more. I was a little disappointed that it didn't tie back to the introduction, with the trash-covered city, etc. It would have been nice to mention how the world could be cleaner, and say how a 'city wouldn't be covered in trash', etc. It would tie the whole message back very nicely. Besides that, I feel like the conclusion was a little beggy-feeling -- the way it was written feels a little less informational (which is what a conclusion is) but also directs the writing towards the reader. You could possibly add more personal ideas in there; about a household and the reader's everyday life, to really manifest the concept of recycling and improve the chances of the reader wanting to recycle.

I really liked the introduction! It painted a very good and impacting picture in my mind! Frankly, the topic you are discussing is a common issue and needs to be put into effect, so there is definitely a good reaction towards the topic idea.

Hopefully this review helped! I should really get going on your poem that you requested a review for. Oops. If you have any questions please ask! <3




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Thanks so much for the review! This will be really helpful information to keep in mind for my next essay.



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Hey TheBlueCat,

Shady here with a review of your essay!

Picture this: city streets covered in slimy, sticky junk with nowhere to walk. Skyscrapers, which you can't see because of the choking, gray smog, covered in filthy plastic bags. Scummy, sluggish black water oozing past, carrying uncountable amounts if trash. Trash piled sky-high and not a living thing anywhere in sight; not even a weed because of the tragically unlivable conditions. Not a pleasant picture, right? This is the exactly why we need to recycle. Recycling is a crucial part of caring for the environment because it reduces pollution, saves renewable and nonrenewable materials, and saves energy.


This is a really good first paragraph. You had excellent visualization, which pulls the reader in quickly and gives us poignant mental images that are startling and frankly sickening. One critique I had from this paragraph is the bolded section above.

What, exactly, is covered in filthy plastic bags? You were talking about the smog, which makes me think that the smog is covered in filthy plastic bags, which doesn't make sense. But even if you go back to the beginning of the sentence and talking about skyscrapers, are they the things covered in filthy plastic bags? I'm just not sure what you're going for there.

If we used all of our trees for paper, we would surely die, as tree provide our main source of oxygen.


I agree with your premise that we should protect trees, and that they are important for producing oxygen -- however, your statement is factually incorrect here (sorry, I'm going to go full-on biology major on you here). The majority of the world's oxygen, I don't remember how much exactly but I believe it's between like 50-85%, is produced by phytoplankton in the ocean. So while trees are very important and shouldn't be carelessly cut down and used to make more paper products (because oxygen and also more importantly the habitats they provide for the ecosystem), they are not, in fact, the main producers of oxygen.

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Overall, I think you had an excellent article. I am actually a teacher now (I knowwww, I'm one of the old YWSers) and I think I would also have given you a 25/25 out of it if you were my student. It's very thoughtful and it's clear you put time and effort into researching the topic and finding sources.

You also don't appear to have simply copied and pasted your information, so that's another great plus. I also like the tone you wrote it with -- it's not attacking or condescending, but gets across the point of how vitally important recycling is for the health of our earth.

Very good job!

Keep writing!

~Shady 8)




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Thank you so much for the review!



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This is a very informative and good essay. It has just the right amount of expression on why to recycle and then it gives true facts. I myself write essays like this in school as well and they end up twice as long. Citing where you found the information was a really good idea. Even though we aren't here to learn about where you found the information it helps us readers understand that the information is true. At school I am part of green team and so recycling is something I do on a regular basis because my school joined grades of green. Anyway off topic, the only thing that I have trouble with is the beginning. When you said " Skyscrapers, which you can't see because of the choking, gray smog, covered in filthy plastic bags." When you say "Covered in filthy plastic bags" it doesn't really make since due to you talking about a skyscraper when you mention plastic bags it seems a little bit strange because how often do plastic bags even manage to get that high in the first place. That part is a bit confusing and I would like for a bit more clarification. Thats all for this review. Bye~




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Thanks for the review!



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My older sister is obsessed with recycling and composting so our house stays pretty green.




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YAAAAAAAAASSSSSSS!!! YOu did it!!!!! You posted it on here!!!!! You are such amaze!




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@Lake ;)




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o.o


I was the only one mentioned, does that mean I'm special?



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The wfp thing, remember? Oh I see the other comment haha




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