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Career goals essay

by TheBlueCat

Note: This is a scholarship essay "describing your career goals and why you want to attend a 2 or 4-year college, technical or trade school." Please review accordingly! :)

I’ve always wanted to create stories that change the way people see the world, and discovered that the virtual reality medium can open one’s eyes to new experiences, both without limits and more limited than one’s current experiences. My goals entail creating unique story-based interactive experiences unlike any found today, with a choice-based game mechanic that allows players to take the story in any direction they choose. This freedom allows players to experience the consequences of their actions in an environment that allows mistakes to be made without devastating consequences in the real world. I plan to center these stories around unacknowledged and misrepresented real life stories and experiences to allow players to truly take a step into someone else’s shoes, whilst utilizing engaging and unique fantastical tales. Not only will these experiences bring light to the underrepresented, but also allow them to participate with adjustable difficulty and better accessibility to allow a larger range of people to experience the joy of the game. The technology of VR is so unique that it can allow this accessibility more than other game consoles, along with the different ways to experience the stories.

I know attending a four year college will equip me with the expertise needed to be able to create these complicated games, skills I could not gain on my own, as well as the credit that most jobs require for the higher positions I aim for. The skills gained at a four-year institution will prepare me not only with technical abilities, but also with the cognitive prowess to approach this career with ingenuity, a creative aptitude, and unique interpersonal talent. The knowledge gained will also give me credibility not gained from any other certification, or lack thereof. This will be vital to communicate my abilities to employers in the high level career I hope to strive for. With the skills gained from attending a four year college, I will finally be able to achieve my lofty career goals that wouldn't be possible otherwise.

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Mon Mar 22, 2021 1:54 pm
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HJYoung wrote a review...

HJ here with a review!
Wow lots of fancy language!

Anyways, on to the review. I feel the first sentence is probably one of the most important parts of your essay showing what you want to do, and how you want to achieve it. That is one of the most important parts of any scholarship essay-and you did it well. I dont see any grammatical or spelling issues, major, or minor. You give many different reasons as to why VR is unique and good for what you want to do, and you list your abilities and skills in a concise manner, which is exactly what you need for such an essay. When i am 18, in 5 years, i will probably write a similar kind of essay, just a bit longer. overall, 10/10, good job.

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Mon Mar 22, 2021 10:47 am
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ForeverYoung299 wrote a review...

Hello. Here for a review.

I loved it. Although at the present moment, I am a mere school student but I really liked your ideas about College life. I really appreciate the game ideas. I am a bit confused about it. Do you want to pursue your carrier in writing or you want to create games based on stories? I think the latter is correct.

Whatever, this was a good essay. And best of luck gor your carrier.


TheBlueCat says...

I actually hope to both write the stories and create the game! Thank you for the feedback :)

ForeverYoung299 says...

I understand. That's great

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illy7896 says...

I'm nowhere near that stage of college so I won't leave a review, but I think that it's a good, informative and direct essay and is an impressive admission form. I hope that you get in, and those sound like really cool game ideas! Good luck, I'm pretty sure that you'll succeed in attending that college and I wish you luck on your journey to achieving your goals.

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