'Ello there!
I love a good informational piece; especially when it's about something I haven't researched a lot / know nothing about in general, so hopefully this will 1. teach me something new, 2. be put together in an organized way where I can clearly see the splits of ideas, and 3. follow the "rules" of essay writing that most people observe.
Let's check out your introduction:
The 1918-19 flu pandemic in Canada truly tested our ability to thrive and adapt.
This is attention-grabbing. It provides a "setting" of sorts for what the topic of this will be, but there is no general to specific shift here. I can take your first paragraph and change the names and dates, and then, it would still sound good.
How did they test strength? What exactly carried this from just Canada suffering to a worldwide issue? How was Canada before all of this occurred? There should be some background information to start out with.
There's also a thesis statement, which should have the primary focus when you write an essay. It covers what you would discuss in your paper and would be supported with evidence of it being correct or something to agree with. I can't pick out a sentence that would work as that in your first paragraph (or introduction.)
Now the body is evidence and your own ideas. It has the ordering of
chronological, spatial, and emphatic. The most narrative is chronological, spatial is for mainly locations, and emphatic is least important to most important.
In fact places like Alaska and Greenland have only had a few cases. Yet in 1918 the flu was able to wipe out entire communities.
The transition between this isn't great. Transition sentences are typically present to create a flow between your ideas to make them compatible, and if they aren't considered that, it might mess up how others perceive this.
Then we have the conclusion:
This should wrap up everything and restate your main idea (which is the similarity between Covid and the Spanish Flu.)
Last paragraph sort of restates everything, and wraps up everything nicely to me. It doesn't feel essay ending though, so maybe work on how professional / informational you want to be throughout all of this writing.
Oh and, cite your evidence!
Good job!
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