Hello @Stellarjay! Hope you're having a good morning/afternoon/evening wherever you’re at! I'll be popping in here for a quick little review.
Grows
Alrighty, let's goOoO!
As @Hkumar said below, in this stanza,
, using the word "pig" twice does make it seem a little bumpy so maybe try to replace it with another word.The pig tries to twist it
into demons and caves
pigs and vomit.
Other than that... there's not really much I had for the Grows

Glows
and let's goOoO again!
Okay, so first off, the first stanza is... amazing to put frankly!
I love how you incorporated the stuffy into this stanza which is so relatable for me! And in the third stanza the way you describe the person trying to take their mind off the bad stuff, distracting themselves from the stress and anxiety by thinking of pleasant things but it just doesn't work. Overall, really loved reading this poem! Keep it up and keep writing!Awake at 3am(add a space here between 3 and am)
I find myself hugging a stuffy
as if to fend off some evil
keeping myself safe
in innocent bliss.

~Your friendly neighborhood Majesty of Nastiness~
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