Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Dan stood in the open, window his heart racing, wondering if he would survive the night. Many dreadful, things were pounding in his head, as he left the window his reflection caught his eye, how he hated his looks, startlingly blue eyes, white blond hair and his pale skin, an albino. As he walked away from the mirror, he realized that he was no longer alone.
" Daniel, that was your last chance to be a z-file, you know the consequence of not obeying a direct order, don't you?," Michal's high pitched voice was propelled around the stone room, making it sound like there was 100 people in the room.
OKay...well here we have another prologue on the much smaller side of things here, although I do have to say for this one, it is not one of those prologues where it manages to be effective in a smaller size, in fact it seems this one has a proper abrupt cut off there with no real planned ending in sight. It certainly is an interesting choice.
The starting paragraph is done nicely, especially when it comes to getting our attention as readers. I think you've done quite well there in terms of that particular situation. It seems like an unusual description for someone to have and the way that people seem to be reacting to it suggests there is something about it that is perhaps not being revealed just yet. And then of course that last beat here which suggests this person seems to almost be running away from something, something that seems to perhaps be the cause for all of this change really nails home the intrigue here. The only issue is that it just ends there without really going into any more of the details here and that makes this a much weaker prologue.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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