Hey Password, I'm a little late to review this but decided to do it for RevMo. This was a really great short story. It not only delivered an amazing message but also gave a really entertaining read. For being such a short piece it really didn't feel rushed at all. The only problem I have with this is when you say
espite what I've said you need both the dark and the light in your life.
This really doesn't make sense to what the rest of the story is telling you. I would maybe rephrase that to make it more understandable. Overall this is an amazing short story and I can't wait to read more from you. Welcome to YWS and happy writing!
-RadDog
Points: 31
Reviews: 62
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