Published April 12, 2008
I'm ready to go
Im ready to rock n roll
I'm ready to blow this town.
I'm ready to roll.
So far thats all I can get.
I'm not sure about the 2nd verse.
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This was a bit random...
I expected more.
Trystyn!
*looks over 'song'*
It doesn't make any since...
I'm sorry but it doesn't...
I'll help you out with my new Alto Sax, kay?
And you can play your TRUMPET!
Just Kidding...o_O
Anyways, I'll help you out to figure out more, kay?
B2B & S2S ROX!
~Lulu
This is extremely short and repetitive. You need to lenghthen it and add more substance. Every song has a reason why it was written, normally to express emotion. Get more descriptive. This might be good for a chorus, but it's not considered a song. where were you trying to go with this? I would suggest adding verses to lenghthen it and get some different thoughts and expressions in there.
Happy editing!
Jamie
You also could've posted it as a draft.
It doesn't have much to say about it SIC.
Er....as this stands I don't think you can really call this a song. The first verse is a bit generic and repetitive and the rest is non-existent.
If you want opinions on that you are probably better off posting in your blog or something.
Let me know if you post the whole song - I will be happy to help you then.
All the best,
Alainna
xx