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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Okayy...really loving this prologue here on first glance. This story looks like its full of things that I really love to see in a story...should be fun going forward here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
„She murdered people. Hundreds of them.”
„Hundreds? I heard they were thousands”, an old man, barely standing, interrupted the debate between two young men. Robin never understood why these old men were still coming to the tavern. Even more so as „The three little pigs” was known for being loud and thieves would come there often. But Robin wouldn’t know anything about thieves, would he? Still, old Silvester was starting to become quite annoying.
Well that's quite an entertaining opening. I really like the name of that bar for sure...also quite fun to talk about possibly thousands of murders too...so that always make for quite a fun start too.
„Lad! Another whiskey!”, the voice of an Irishman resounded. „ Now, where did you hear that, old man?”. He was quite tall, with reddish hair and a beard. His axe was stuck in one of the cracks of the wooden table. He wanted to make sure that the other people knew he was armed.
„Places, places...”
Not sure sticking an axe into a crack is the best way to make sure you can draw it out quickly. But it definitely brings in the intimidation points so that is a plus I suppose, well interesting character nonetheless.
„Do you think people are really following her? I have the feeling they are forced to...”
„Nah. They chose to follow her. It’s the Dark Lands. They don’t think as we do. Not much of a mind, if you ask me.” He takes a noisy sip from his drink. „ Mostly cowards. *hickup* If you ask me. They are afraid to fight her so they follow her. Huh! Cowards...” The Irishman had always despised Cowards. They were the worst kind of mankind, if you can call them that...
„Maybe. Some of them like her ideas, her approach...”
Well those are some quite fun names getting thrown around all over the place....this prologue is proving to be quite interesting so far.
„Of course they do! They’re villains. They live with dragons, ogres and who knows how many other monsters. They are all monsters! They worship a woman with no heart! The Evil Queen...I don’t think there’s any humanity left in her! Only darkness.” Robin was triggered by what the man had said. No heart? How can she have no heart? What kind of dark magic is she using?
„She has no heart?”
It is always quite a lot of fun when darkness gets involved in these schemes, looks like we're talking about someone that's quite horrible...I guess that's all very clearly mentioned right there in that title.
„Nah, she is only darkness. Heroes don’t even know her face. She casts shadows made of nightmares before they can even get too close, and her dragon burns everything in her way.”
„Heard she speaks Draconis...”, added Silvester.
„Now that’s impossible. The language has been forbidden, forgotten. The last one that had spoken it was Rumpelstilskin.” Robin didn’t realise at first that Silvester knew the name a little too well...
Oh dear...we're going right for some of the really crazy names, love that. And a forbidden language, those are also always so much fun. Well this is going really well so far, its full of elements that I love to read in a story.
„Oh!Oh! The name, the name...Dark times...Dark times...” He was so old that he had lived those times. The times of the emperor of evil. He left, lost in his memories.
„The old man, *hickup*, has been around for a while. People say the old pal saw him, the emperor”; the Irishman did not dare say his name. As a matter of fact, Robin was one of the few who weren’t scared by his name.
More intriguing news I see....loving all of this conversation so far.
Horses could be heard in the distance and that was the only signal Robin needed to leave. He left two gold coins on the table and left through the back door. He crossed the woods, he knew the way and no one could keep up with him. No one could keep up with him anywhere. He was always at least five steps before you. The green hood that he was wearing got lost among the trees. He was like smoke, and he made sure you would only try to catch him with your bare hands.
Well...there we go...looks like we're going off here on quite an adventure to get things underway. I would say this prologue has been quite a success.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall I think this is set to be quite a story. This prologue has pretty much everything that you want to see in a prologue. And yup, that's about all I gotta say for now.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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