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-Mercedes

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First Impression: This was quite the little meeting here. Secrets being revealed is quite the move but I think its going to lay some interesting foundations here. This story is certainly poised to start going a few ways in the next few chapters especially because I think with these two groups having met we'll actually get a hint of what the plot itself might be like.

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Brandon wasted no time going to the bathroom to wash off the dog’s slobber as soon as they got to the cabin, and Kassie pointed him in the direction of it. Brandon almost gagged when he saw himself in the mirror. His hair was sticking straight up in multiple directions.

Outside the bathroom in the living room of the cabin, Aaron helped Ashlyn sit down on a couch. His eager eyes lifted to give the place a curious glance as he set down the bags he had slung over a shoulder down beside his sister.

“Wow, this place is huge. You could fit an army in here.”

Kassie laughed and knelt down to stroke Lexi behind her ears. “My parents are renting it for a small family anniversary, and me and Jed get the place to ourselves until our relatives arrive.”

Aaron moved back to the couch and sat down next to his sister. He looked at her worriedly because even while she slept, she still looked so tired.

“Do you happen to hear that loud bang that happened a second ago?” Jed as he as stepped toward the blond siblings sitting on the couch.

Aaron glanced up. “Yeah. We actually—”

Ashlyn pinched his arm, keeping her eyes shut.

Aaron glanced down at his sister and bit his lip. “We heard it,” he responded quietly.

“And you don’t know anything about it?” Jed pressed, taking a step closer.

Aaron’s red eyes bounced across the floor as he considered how to respond.

Jed sighed. “Okay, well at least you should be able to tell me what you’re doing here and where you came from. As far as I’m aware, that forest is considered part of the property of this cabin, so technically…” His voice trailed off dramatically as he crossed his arms and cocked an eyebrow slightly. “You’re trespassing.”

Kassie frowned and stood up, leaving the dog stretched out by the wall.

Aaron glanced up. “Uh…we’re from…uh….”

“You don’t even know where you’re from?” Jed snapped, frowning skeptically at Aaron’s hesitation and impatiently tapping his fingers on his crossed arms.

“No, I do,” Aaron replied. He rubbed the back of his neck nervously. “We’re from—"

“We live a good way away,” Brandon’s voice said from behind him. He met Aaron’s gaze telling him not to say anything more about it.

“Where?” Jed pressured, keeping his eyes fused to Aaron’s face.

“Oh, leave them alone, would you, Jed?” Kassie pleaded, casting her cousin a pleading glance. She cast Ashlyn a glance, and her frown faded into sympathy. “It looks like they’ve had a long day.”

Her eyes lifted and moved to Brandon. “You guys must be hungry. Come on. We have snacks in the kitchen.” She shot Jed a warning glance and nodded toward the kitchen. Rolling his eyes, Jed followed her dog and Brandon out of the room.

Aaron was left alone with his sister. Aaron looked down at her, but his attention drifted to a strange device with lots of buttons next to him. He picked it up and tried touching one. It did nothing.

“Put that down,” Ashlyn ordered, sensing through her shut eyes that her brother was up to mischief.

Aaron cast his sister a glance and returned his curious red eyes to the remote. He tried another button. A black shiny box in front of him turned on and loud noises and bright colors exploded inside of it. Aaron jumped with a yelp of fright, practically throwing the remote away from him as he jumped over the couch to hide behind it. He poked his head up enough so that he could see the box.

Kassie’s dog bounded into the room, barking loudly followed by Kassie.

“Are you okay?” Kassie asked, swiftly running up to Aaron. “What happened?” She looked at the box and shivered, “I don’t like horror shows either. This TV is horrible. Every time you turn it on during the day, there isn’t anything good to watch.”

“Kassie! Get away from him!” Jed yelled from the doorway. He hurried over to her and stood protectively in front of her.

“What’s wrong?” Kassie asked, stepping back and peeking curiously over her cousin’s shoulder.

Aaron stood up with confusion. Then, he realized it. When he had jumped over the couch, one of his dragon wings had been revealed. He quickly pulled the cape over it and put his hands out in innocence. “Wait, let me explain!”

“What are you?” Jed asked, flashing his eyes questioningly over the teenager’s shoulder from where he had seen the wing.

“Those are so awesome!” Kassie shouted from behind Jed. She gently pushed Jed out of the way and pulled Aaron’s cape off to reveal both wings. Aaron moved to the closest corner of the room with the darkest shadows in the attempt to hide. But it didn’t do anything. Kassie still reached her hands out and touched his wings.

“Oh, my gosh! This is so cool!” Kassie exclaimed, moving her fingers over the strange texture in amazement.

“Brandon!” Aaron screamed. “Help!”

Kassie backed away and rubbed an ear over her shoulder, “Hey, no need to yell so loudly. Nobody’s deaf here.”

Ashlyn cracked an eye open, and saw Brandon run out of the kitchen. Leaving the matter in Brandon’s hands, she shut her eyes again.

Brandon rushed into the room and stopped short, gazing mystified at the cloak on the floor, Aaron, and Jed who was trying to get Kassie to come to his side. His eyes moved back to Aaron. “What did you do? Can I not leave you alone for five minutes?”

Aaron tried to speak, but no words came out.

“Do you mind explaining what’s going on?” Jed asked, lifting his chin to give himself more of an authoritative look.

Brandon looked at Ashlyn who was completely passed out on the couch. She would know what to do much better than he would. Through his bangs, Brandon glanced at Aaron. “Should we tell them?”

Aaron only shrugged in an “I have no idea” gesture. “Why are you asking me?”

Brandon drew in a deep breath. “Maybe we should sit down and talk.” He sat down on a seat closest to Ashlyn and waited for the others to sit down. “So, this is going to sound really weird, but we are from another world, and we accidentally came here on the way to somewhere else.”

“Wait…so you guys aren’t in a movie?” Kassie asked, seeming disappointed.

“No!” Jed answered, his eyes snapping to Kassie’s face. “Of course they aren’t! How do you think a director would be able to get wings to grow literally right out of their shoulders like that, Kass?”

“Did you guys come in a spaceship?” Kassie suddenly asked, her face lighting up enthusiastically.

Aaron cocked his head to the side. “What’s a spaceship?”

“Never mind that. Finish explaining.” Jed demanded, keeping his eyes fixed to Brandon’s face in an unyielding glare.

Brandon sat back. “We meant to go to Ash’s home. But something happened, and we came here instead. Aaron and Ashlyn are dragonoids—meaning they are half dragon people. They have dragon wings—as you’ve seen from Aaron—and they can each make fire on command without it hurting them.”

“So, you guys are aliens?” Kassie asked, frowning skeptically. She cast Jed a glance. “I mean, that’s cool, too.”

Jed shook his head and slid a thin silver rectangle from a pocket in his jacket. “I’m calling the authorities.”

Brandon panicked. “No! You can’t!”

Jed glared at Brandon. “Give me one good reason not to.”

“We’re not dangerous. We just need somewhere to stay until Ash has her strength back. Look at her. She’s completely passed out.”

“‘Not dangerous?’” Jed asked, quizzically. “How are two dragon beings that can make fire and a guy with a real sword, not be dangerous?”

“Jed, you can’t call the police!” Kassie exclaimed, standing up. “I don’t think they’re dangerous.” Her eyes moved to Ashlyn, leaning her head on the armrest beside her. Her compassionate eyes moved back to her cousin. “Look at them, Jed. They’re tired and—”

“I don’t believe you,” Jed replied stubbornly, casting Brandon a particularly firm glare.

“They can make fire,” Kassie continued, stepping up to Jed and lowering his arm to his side. “If they were dangerous, they would have attacked us when we were in the forest. Let them stay. They’re nice people.”

“You guys have plenty of room,” Aaron added, casting the living room another glance. “We won’t be a problem.”

“Aaron, shush,” Brandon ordered in a scolding tone.

Aaron ignored him and stood up. “Please, me and my sister can’t be caught.” He started to fade out. “Where’s the dog?” he asked Brandon.

“Aaron, you’re fading out.” Brandon told him.

Aaron got irritated at himself. He frowned and shook his head, calming himself before going back to the topic. His sincere red eyes lifted. “If they catch us there’s no telling what people here will do to us. We would never hurt you. I’m begging you, please don’t call anyone.”

Kassie looked at Jed. “Jed…”

Jed sighed and put the phone down. “Fine. You can stay. But only until she’s well enough to take you back.”

“Thank you,” the boys said at the same time.

Kassie smiled faintly. Her eyes moved to the scowl on Jed’s face. Deciding to ignore it, Kassie turned back to the guests. “Well, if you guys are staying, we need to figure out what room you guys will be in.”

“And there probably won’t even be enough rooms for all of us,” Jed muttered, casting Kassie an unfriendly glance.

“Well, yeah, but they could…” Kassie’s voice trailed off as Jed stepped past her and started toward the kitchen. Kassie’s attention returned to the guests. “I’m sorry about Jed. He’s just in a bad mood and…” She cast the doorway another glance and pulled at her lower lip.

Her dog joined her at her side as if to comfort her.

“Apology accepted,” Aaron announced. “Where are we staying?”

Kassie cast Ashlyn a nervous glance. “Um…Let me show the rooms and you guys choose the rooms you want to have as yours. That good?”

Brandon nodded. He turned to Aaron. “You stay here with Ashlyn, and I’ll assign rooms.”

Aaron frowned. “But I want to see the rooms to, and—”

“After all the trouble you’ve caused—”

Kassie gently cut Brandon off. “He could come, too. We’ll only be gone for a little bit.”

Brandon cast Aaron a distrusting glance and returned his attention to Kassie. He nodded. “Get the bags.”

Aaron nodded, smiling gratefully as he grabbed the traveler’s belongings and followed Kassie to the hallway leading to the other rooms in the cabin. The dog trailed behind him.

Kassie stopped outside the first door on the right and opened it. “This is a smaller room, but I think it’s pretty nice. Like, I mean…all the rooms are nice and everything but…”

Aaron pressed past Kassie and cast the room a glance. “It is nice. Kinda small, but—”

“Ashlyn might appreciate being on the first floor. Let’s give this room to her,” Brandon suggested practically.

Kassie nodded. “That’s fine.” She backed out of the room and nodded across the hallway at the door directly opposite the one she had just pulled open. “That’s Jed’s room.” She started down the hallway to the stairs but suddenly halted and glanced up at the ceiling. She turned around and pointed at Brandon and then Aaron. She pointed to herself and lifted four fingers while her dog squeezed past her and bounded up the stairs ahead of her. “They’re four of us. Perfect. They’re four rooms.”

“Five,” Brandon interrupted as Kassie started up the stairs after her dog. “There’s five of us. Someone will have to share.”

“Oh, that’ll work out,” Kassie replied optimistically as she started up the steps. “The other room downstairs has two beds.” She reached the top of the stairs and flicked on a light, flooding a small common area with light. “Oh, but…” she lifted a finger to her lips as Aaron stepped past her and opened one of the two doors and peered inside.

“Wow! Check out this view, guys!” Aaron exclaimed from within.

Kassie turned back to Brandon. “The room with two beds is Jed’s room.”

Aaron popped back out of the room. “I don’t mind sharing with him,” he volunteered.

Kassie frowned and cast the stairs a nervous glance. “Yeah, but I’m not sure if Jed would be okay with that.” She gestured to the other door her dog had disappeared into. “I mean, that’s my room. Maybe Ashlyn could share a room with me.”

“The stairs would be difficult for her,” Aaron pointed out.

Kassie nodded. “Well, for now, let’s just call the other room downstairs yours. Jed can move up here with me if rearrangements need to happen.” She turned to Brandon. “I guess that means you’ll have the room across from mine.”

Brandon nodded and stepped past Kassie. He pushed open the door to the room they spoke about and entered the room.

Kassie turned to Aaron. “I’m going downstairs and get something started for supper.”

“Supper?” Aaron repeated with evident interest. “Are we going to get fed, too?”

“Well of course,” Kassie replied matter-of-a-factly as she started down the stairs. “We won’t have guests go hungry.”

“Awesome! Can I help, too?” Aaron asked eagerly. “It might go faster, and I’m starving.”

Kassie smiled and nodded.

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Brandon wasted no time going to the bathroom to wash off the dog’s slobber as soon as they got to the cabin, and Kassie pointed him in the direction of it. Brandon almost gagged when he saw himself in the mirror. His hair was sticking straight up in multiple directions.

Outside the bathroom in the living room of the cabin, Aaron helped Ashlyn sit down on a couch. His eager eyes lifted to give the place a curious glance as he set down the bags he had slung over a shoulder down beside his sister.

“Wow, this place is huge. You could fit an army in here.”

Kassie laughed and knelt down to stroke Lexi behind her ears. “My parents are renting it for a small family anniversary, and me and Jed get the place to ourselves until our relatives arrive.”

Aaron moved back to the couch and sat down next to his sister. He looked at her worriedly because even while she slept, she still looked so tired.

“Do you happen to hear that loud bang that happened a second ago?” Jed as he as stepped toward the blond siblings sitting on the couch.

Aaron glanced up. “Yeah. We actually—”

Ashlyn pinched his arm, keeping her eyes shut.

Aaron glanced down at his sister and bit his lip. “We heard it,” he responded quietly.

“And you don’t know anything about it?” Jed pressed, taking a step closer.

Aaron’s red eyes bounced across the floor as he considered how to respond.

Jed sighed. “Okay, well at least you should be able to tell me what you’re doing here and where you came from. As far as I’m aware, that forest is considered part of the property of this cabin, so technically…” His voice trailed off dramatically as he crossed his arms and cocked an eyebrow slightly. “You’re trespassing.”

Kassie frowned and stood up, leaving the dog stretched out by the wall.

Aaron glanced up. “Uh…we’re from…uh….”

“You don’t even know where you’re from?” Jed snapped, frowning skeptically at Aaron’s hesitation and impatiently tapping his fingers on his crossed arms.

“No, I do,” Aaron replied. He rubbed the back of his neck nervously. “We’re from—"

“We live a good way away,” Brandon’s voice said from behind him. He met Aaron’s gaze telling him not to say anything more about it.

“Where?” Jed pressured, keeping his eyes fused to Aaron’s face.

“Oh, leave them alone, would you, Jed?” Kassie pleaded, casting her cousin a pleading glance. She cast Ashlyn a glance, and her frown faded into sympathy. “It looks like they’ve had a long day.”

Her eyes lifted and moved to Brandon. “You guys must be hungry. Come on. We have snacks in the kitchen.” She shot Jed a warning glance and nodded toward the kitchen. Rolling his eyes, Jed followed her dog and Brandon out of the room.

Aaron was left alone with his sister. Aaron looked down at her, but his attention drifted to a strange device with lots of buttons next to him. He picked it up and tried touching one. It did nothing.

“Put that down,” Ashlyn ordered, sensing through her shut eyes that her brother was up to mischief.

Aaron cast his sister a glance and returned his curious red eyes to the remote. He tried another button. A black shiny box in front of him turned on and loud noises and bright colors exploded inside of it. Aaron jumped with a yelp of fright, practically throwing the remote away from him as he jumped over the couch to hide behind it. He poked his head up enough so that he could see the box.

Kassie’s dog bounded into the room, barking loudly followed by Kassie.

“Are you okay?” Kassie asked, swiftly running up to Aaron. “What happened?” She looked at the box and shivered, “I don’t like horror shows either. This TV is horrible. Every time you turn it on during the day, there isn’t anything good to watch.”

“Kassie! Get away from him!” Jed yelled from the doorway. He hurried over to her and stood protectively in front of her.

“What’s wrong?” Kassie asked, stepping back and peeking curiously over her cousin’s shoulder.

Aaron stood up with confusion. Then, he realized it. When he had jumped over the couch, one of his dragon wings had been revealed. He quickly pulled the cape over it and put his hands out in innocence. “Wait, let me explain!”

“What are you?” Jed asked, flashing his eyes questioningly over the teenager’s shoulder from where he had seen the wing.

“Those are so awesome!” Kassie shouted from behind Jed. She gently pushed Jed out of the way and pulled Aaron’s cape off to reveal both wings. Aaron moved to the closest corner of the room with the darkest shadows in the attempt to hide. But it didn’t do anything. Kassie still reached her hands out and touched his wings.

“Oh, my gosh! This is so cool!” Kassie exclaimed, moving her fingers over the strange texture in amazement.

“Brandon!” Aaron screamed. “Help!”

Kassie backed away and rubbed an ear over her shoulder, “Hey, no need to yell so loudly. Nobody’s deaf here.”

Ashlyn cracked an eye open, and saw Brandon run out of the kitchen. Leaving the matter in Brandon’s hands, she shut her eyes again.

Brandon rushed into the room and stopped short, gazing mystified at the cloak on the floor, Aaron, and Jed who was trying to get Kassie to come to his side. His eyes moved back to Aaron. “What did you do? Can I not leave you alone for five minutes?”

Aaron tried to speak, but no words came out.

“Do you mind explaining what’s going on?” Jed asked, lifting his chin to give himself more of an authoritative look.

Brandon looked at Ashlyn who was completely passed out on the couch. She would know what to do much better than he would. Through his bangs, Brandon glanced at Aaron. “Should we tell them?”

Aaron only shrugged in an “I have no idea” gesture. “Why are you asking me?”

Brandon drew in a deep breath. “Maybe we should sit down and talk.” He sat down on a seat closest to Ashlyn and waited for the others to sit down. “So, this is going to sound really weird, but we are from another world, and we accidentally came here on the way to somewhere else.”

“Wait…so you guys aren’t in a movie?” Kassie asked, seeming disappointed.

“No!” Jed answered, his eyes snapping to Kassie’s face. “Of course they aren’t! How do you think a director would be able to get wings to grow literally right out of their shoulders like that, Kass?”

“Did you guys come in a spaceship?” Kassie suddenly asked, her face lighting up enthusiastically.

Aaron cocked his head to the side. “What’s a spaceship?”

“Never mind that. Finish explaining.” Jed demanded, keeping his eyes fixed to Brandon’s face in an unyielding glare.

Brandon sat back. “We meant to go to Ash’s home. But something happened, and we came here instead. Aaron and Ashlyn are dragonoids—meaning they are half dragon people. They have dragon wings—as you’ve seen from Aaron—and they can each make fire on command without it hurting them.”

“So, you guys are aliens?” Kassie asked, frowning skeptically. She cast Jed a glance. “I mean, that’s cool, too.”

Jed shook his head and slid a thin silver rectangle from a pocket in his jacket. “I’m calling the authorities.”

Brandon panicked. “No! You can’t!”

Jed glared at Brandon. “Give me one good reason not to.”

“We’re not dangerous. We just need somewhere to stay until Ash has her strength back. Look at her. She’s completely passed out.”

“‘Not dangerous?’” Jed asked, quizzically. “How are two dragon beings that can make fire and a guy with a real sword, not be dangerous?”

“Jed, you can’t call the police!” Kassie exclaimed, standing up. “I don’t think they’re dangerous.” Her eyes moved to Ashlyn, leaning her head on the armrest beside her. Her compassionate eyes moved back to her cousin. “Look at them, Jed. They’re tired and—”

“I don’t believe you,” Jed replied stubbornly, casting Brandon a particularly firm glare.

“They can make fire,” Kassie continued, stepping up to Jed and lowering his arm to his side. “If they were dangerous, they would have attacked us when we were in the forest. Let them stay. They’re nice people.”

“You guys have plenty of room,” Aaron added, casting the living room another glance. “We won’t be a problem.”

“Aaron, shush,” Brandon ordered in a scolding tone.

Aaron ignored him and stood up. “Please, me and my sister can’t be caught.” He started to fade out. “Where’s the dog?” he asked Brandon.

“Aaron, you’re fading out.” Brandon told him.

Aaron got irritated at himself. He frowned and shook his head, calming himself before going back to the topic. His sincere red eyes lifted. “If they catch us there’s no telling what people here will do to us. We would never hurt you. I’m begging you, please don’t call anyone.”

Kassie looked at Jed. “Jed…”

Jed sighed and put the phone down. “Fine. You can stay. But only until she’s well enough to take you back.”

“Thank you,” the boys said at the same time.

Kassie smiled faintly. Her eyes moved to the scowl on Jed’s face. Deciding to ignore it, Kassie turned back to the guests. “Well, if you guys are staying, we need to figure out what room you guys will be in.”

“And there probably won’t even be enough rooms for all of us,” Jed muttered, casting Kassie an unfriendly glance.

“Well, yeah, but they could…” Kassie’s voice trailed off as Jed stepped past her and started toward the kitchen. Kassie’s attention returned to the guests. “I’m sorry about Jed. He’s just in a bad mood and…” She cast the doorway another glance and pulled at her lower lip.

Her dog joined her at her side as if to comfort her.

“Apology accepted,” Aaron announced. “Where are we staying?”

Kassie cast Ashlyn a nervous glance. “Um…Let me show the rooms and you guys choose the rooms you want to have as yours. That good?”

Brandon nodded. He turned to Aaron. “You stay here with Ashlyn, and I’ll assign rooms.”

Aaron frowned. “But I want to see the rooms to, and—”

“After all the trouble you’ve caused—”

Kassie gently cut Brandon off. “He could come, too. We’ll only be gone for a little bit.”

Brandon cast Aaron a distrusting glance and returned his attention to Kassie. He nodded. “Get the bags.”

Aaron nodded, smiling gratefully as he grabbed the traveler’s belongings and followed Kassie to the hallway leading to the other rooms in the cabin. The dog trailed behind him.

Kassie stopped outside the first door on the right and opened it. “This is a smaller room, but I think it’s pretty nice. Like, I mean…all the rooms are nice and everything but…”

Aaron pressed past Kassie and cast the room a glance. “It is nice. Kinda small, but—”

“Ashlyn might appreciate being on the first floor. Let’s give this room to her,” Brandon suggested practically.

Kassie nodded. “That’s fine.” She backed out of the room and nodded across the hallway at the door directly opposite the one she had just pulled open. “That’s Jed’s room.” She started down the hallway to the stairs but suddenly halted and glanced up at the ceiling. She turned around and pointed at Brandon and then Aaron. She pointed to herself and lifted four fingers while her dog squeezed past her and bounded up the stairs ahead of her. “They’re four of us. Perfect. They’re four rooms.”

“Five,” Brandon interrupted as Kassie started up the stairs after her dog. “There’s five of us. Someone will have to share.”

“Oh, that’ll work out,” Kassie replied optimistically as she started up the steps. “The other room downstairs has two beds.” She reached the top of the stairs and flicked on a light, flooding a small common area with light. “Oh, but…” she lifted a finger to her lips as Aaron stepped past her and opened one of the two doors and peered inside.

“Wow! Check out this view, guys!” Aaron exclaimed from within.

Kassie turned back to Brandon. “The room with two beds is Jed’s room.”

Aaron popped back out of the room. “I don’t mind sharing with him,” he volunteered.

Kassie frowned and cast the stairs a nervous glance. “Yeah, but I’m not sure if Jed would be okay with that.” She gestured to the other door her dog had disappeared into. “I mean, that’s my room. Maybe Ashlyn could share a room with me.”

“The stairs would be difficult for her,” Aaron pointed out.

Kassie nodded. “Well, for now, let’s just call the other room downstairs yours. Jed can move up here with me if rearrangements need to happen.” She turned to Brandon. “I guess that means you’ll have the room across from mine.”

Brandon nodded and stepped past Kassie. He pushed open the door to the room they spoke about and entered the room.

Kassie turned to Aaron. “I’m going downstairs and get something started for supper.”

“Supper?” Aaron repeated with evident interest. “Are we going to get fed, too?”

“Well of course,” Kassie replied matter-of-a-factly as she started down the stairs. “We won’t have guests go hungry.”

“Awesome! Can I help, too?” Aaron asked eagerly. “It might go faster, and I’m starving.”

Kassie smiled and nodded.