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Magic: Chapter 2

by SkyVibes, Kaia


The portal formed and shaped until a loud bang like an explosion made it clear that the portal had finished, and something was about to come through.

As the portal hummed and stood steady, Aaron came first.

He stumbled as he tried to regain footing from stepping to the other side of the portal. The half dragon boy felt like he had just flown down a hundred-foot slide faster than he could ever fly when all he had done was just simply jump to get to the other side.

After gaining his footing, he put his and the other travelers’ bags down and spun around just in time to help catch his human friend from stumbling to the ground. Brandon shakily stood straight and tried to keep his balance while Aaron’s steady arm stabilized him.

Slightly concerned, Aaron tried to meet his friend’s dizzy blue eyes with his own red eyes. “You good?”

Still dizzy from the trip, Brandon nodded and decided it was best to sit down. As he recovered his hand slipped to the hilt of his sword to make sure it hadn't gone missing during the trip. Aaron stayed next to him in case Brandon needed further help. As Brandon started to come back to a normal state, his head shot up like a cat’s, realizing that something was missing. Aaron realized it too, instantly thinking the same thing.

There were supposed to be three people, not just two on the other side of the portal.

Aaron walked to the entrance of the portal with his wings trembling in anxiousness as he became tempted to jump back in. “Where is she?

“She said she was coming right after me,” Brandon said. He got up and stepped beside his friend. “Are you going to go back in?”

Aaron hesitated and then shook his head. “Let’s give her another second. I don’t want to crash into my sister—if that’s even possible.” He pulled his friend back as he backed a few steps away himself. “Let’s step back in case she does come.”

They waited no more than half a minute before Aaron's sister fell through the portal as it closed. She crashed to the ground with a cry of pain as her wing hit the ground in an awkward position. Aaron rushed over and tried to help her to her feet, but she refused. She didn’t want to move with how unsteady she was both mentally and physically. She put a hand up to stop her brother and fanned him away with it. “Leave me be.”

Brandon stood up and went over to her as she collapsed into a slouched lying position, the portal draining so much of her energy. Brandon put a gentle hand under her chin and made her look at him.

She turned away. “I…I’m fine. I just need some air.” She closed her red eyes and focused on taking in air into her drained lungs. The breeze played with her pretty long, blond hair as she sat there, but the air didn’t seem as relieving as it should be. The air wasn’t as crisp as she remembered it. There wasn’t a coolness to its touch.

Aaron saw her sister's troubled face. “What’s wrong?”

“The air.”

Brandon panicked and grabbed Ashlyn’s shoulders. “You can’t breathe?!”

Ashlyn cracked an eye and winced as she flinched away from him. “I can if you quit strangling me,” she muttered, drawing her cloak closer around herself to cover her wings.

Slightly embarrassed, Brandon sat on his legs and ducked his head as he peered through his brown bangs at his pretty girlfriend. “Sorry.”

Aaron cocked his head to the side and narrowed his eyes at Ashlyn, not understanding. “What’s wrong with the air?” He straightened and took a deep breath and then shrugged. “It’s air. Maybe a little thick but we can all breathe.”

“Yeah, that’s what I mean. It’s not crisp or cool,” Ashlyn answered as she stood up. She looked around trying to find something familiar to her as Brandon stood beside her, helping her balance. She was incredibly tired. The simple jump through a portal felt like a year of energy pulled from her without remorse or mercy.

“The trees aren’t much different either,” Aaron observed, slowly beginning to understand what his sister was getting at. “Soarvania’s trees aren’t supposed to look like normal trees.”

Ashlyn shook her head. “No, they aren’t.”

Most of Soarvania’s unmistakable trees were like willows but with darker wood and glittering leaves that seemed to have the colors gold or silver painted over them. Yet, there wasn’t a single one around.

Brandon looked around also in confusion. “Where are we, then?” He turned around to face Ashlyn and stared fiercely into her face. “Ash, where did you bring us?” he asked sharply.

Ashlyn looked back at Brandon. “I…I don’t know,” she replied fearfully. Her fear wasn’t a normal fear like someone would have towards spiders or the dark. It was a deeper, more dreadful fear of what could happen to them if someone found them. And she knew the others shared it too. Anyone who saw them –-two half dragon people and a regular human with a sword—would panic and attack, getting others to fight along with them.

Aaron’s wings shook, but he tried to remain calm. If his sister sounded scared, there was a good reason for it. “So…we’re stuck somewhere we don’t know, and we can’t go back home. Not until your strength comes back?”

Ashlyn slowly nodded. “I don’t know what happened.”

Brandon got irritated. “Ash, what were you thinking about that diverted your attention?!” he yelled.

Ashlyn stepped away from Brandon, throwing her hands up in the air. “I have no idea!” Stepping a few more feet away, she turned her back to the boys, letting her hands fall to her sides and her wings drag on the ground as she felt defeat grip at her. “I know we aren’t on Airleeniar anymore.”

“Anyone can realize that!” Brandon growled, throwing his hands up exasperatedly again. “What everyone doesn’t know is what you were doing that got us into this mess.”

Aaron watched the two argue. His gaze moved to the sky. Maybe if he got above the treetops he could figure out where they were. Maybe he could find a village, and they could ask someone where they were.

Aaron turned back to the two and tried to get their attention, “Hey, what if-”

“All you had to do was focus!” Brandon yelled, completely oblivious to his friend. “You’ve never lost focus before! What happened?”

Aaron tried again, “Guys-”

“I don’t know!” Ashlyn yelled louder, “Someone must have messed with my portal back at Airleeniar.”

“Guys, what if I-”

Brandon took a step closer at Ashlyn. “Who could have done that?!”

Aaron sighed in annoyance. People easily ignored him since half the time he wasn’t on track and tended to zone out. He crossed his arms and took a deep breath. “Guys!”

Both looked at him. “What?” They barked.

“Let’s just fly and see where we are,” he suggested as he took off.

“Aaron, no!!” Ashlyn yelled. Panic gripped her chest. What if someone saw him? She grabbed Brandon’s arm and pulled at his sleeve. “Brandon, do something!”

“What can I do?” he asked. Panic tinged his voice like Ashlyn’s.

“You can yell louder than me. Call out to him! I’m too tired to fly after him!”

Brandon yelled as loudly as he could, but Aaron was too far up to hear them. Aaron looked around for any sign of life, but they were in the middle of a forest with no one in sight. All he could see was a sea of green treetops.

Disappointed, he dropped back down. Ashlyn smacked him on the back of his head. He winced and rubbed his head. “Ow! What was that for?” he asked, glancing out of his red eyes at his sister.

Ashlyn put her hands on her hips and looked him in the eye. “What stupid idea went through your head?” she asked angrily, staring unblinkingly into Aaron’s eyes, a mere reflection of her own flaming red eyes. “Are you trying to give us a heart attack?”

“No. I was thinking that if there’s someone nearby, we can ask where we are,” Aaron answered sheepishly. What was the harm in that?

Ashlyn crossed her arms, “And ask to get our wings chopped off in the process?”

“No, of course not! I was just-”

“What you did was completely irresponsible and stupid.” Brandon said. “You can’t just take to the skies!” he exclaimed, staring seriously into Aaron’s face. “What if someone saw you? We have no idea where we are, Aaron. There could be people who want to hurt half dragons like you. Now, get your wings covered!”

“But no one did. We’re in a forest. There’s no one around!” Aaron exclaimed, pulling his cloak out of the bag he had left on the ground and draping it over his shoulders to cover his wings.

He lifted a hand and rubbed his head again, his gaze moving back to his sister. “Man, Ash, were you trying to knock my brain out or something?” He wouldn’t be surprised if a lump the shape of her hand had formed on his head.

Ashlyn didn’t find the comment amusing in the least bit. Her brother of all people should know the danger they were in. They were alone in a world they did not know with no one but themselves to trust. Back home people saw them as demons or monsters and constantly tried to harm them. Why should this world be any different?

“So, now what?” Brandon asked Ashlyn. “We can’t start a fire, or it’ll give us away to anyone nearby. And, to make matters worse, we don’t even know where we are.”

Ashlyn looked up at the sky and then down at her shadow. She turned back to Brandon. “We still have time left before the sun starts setting. Let’s at least look for some kind of food.” She swayed suddenly as a wave of tiredness pulled at her. Brandon caught her and helped her sit down. She frowned. “Or maybe you and Aaron can. I need to rest.”

Aaron nodded in agreement and watched his little sister as she tiredly made her way to a large oak try to rest against. 

He looked at Brandon with eagerness. “Well, we might as well get started. We’ll make more progress if the two of us go out.”

Brandon shook his head. After what Aaron just done, there was no way Brandon was going to take Aaron with him and put their lives in even more possible jeopardy. “Uh no. You stay here and keep watch.”

“Aw, but why? I can help.” Aaron tried, staring pleadingly at Brandon through his red eyes.

Brandon sent him a warning look. “I said no. Stay there and don’t move. I’m not gonna have you take to the skies again.”

Sitting down, Aaron sighed and looked around when he heard barking in the distance. “Is that a wolf?”

“What?” Brandon asked, “I don’t hear anything.”

It got louder, and Ashlyn cracked an eye. “Now do you hear it?”

“It’s getting closer,” Aaron added as he stood up. He made his way to Ashlyn to protect her if whatever was coming was dangerous.

Brandon nodded. “Yeah. But where is it? This forest is just echoing it.”

As Brandon bent down to draw his sword, Aaron shouted, “Watch out!” A golden retriever jumped on Brandon, knocking him to the ground and covering him in layers of slobber from its constant kisses. Brandon called for help and reached for his sword lying on the ground beside him where it had fallen when the dog pounced on him.

Aaron laughed at his unfortunate friend. “Nope. You told me to stay right here.”

Brandon pushed the dog off and rolled onto his stomach to push himself up. The dog changed its target and ran to Aaron next.

Aaron laughed as he patted the friendly dog. “Look, she’s harmless.

Brandon shot the dog a glare and glanced down at his clothes. He gagged. The dog had covered him in layers of slobber that slowly began to drip off his arms which he had used to protect himself from the supposed attack.

Ashlyn and Aaron laughed.

Aaron cupped the dog’s face and smiled. “Where are you from, girl?”

The retriever was so happy to see people that she looked like she was smiling at Aaron and licked his face, her tail wagging so much that Ashlyn started to get hit by it. “Aaron, take her somewhere else before her tail starts to bruise me.”

Aaron stood up and the dog followed him to a more open area where Brandon was. Brandon backed away with a deadly scowl. “This is why I prefer cats.” He muttered his various reasons as he wiped his arms with his hands. The dog ran over to him, but Brandon kept her down. “No! Bad dog! Stay down!”

The dog ran back to Aaron who dropped to a knee to pet her. “She’s not a bad dog. She’s just looking for a friend. She likes you.”

Brandon didn’t even bother to look at them. “Well I don’t! Keep the beast off me.”

“Hey, what if her owner is somewhere nearby?” Aaron suddenly asked, glancing up at Brandon. “Maybe they can help us figure out where we are.”

“How do you know she has an owner?” Ashlyn asked with her eyes shut.

“She’s too well kept to be wild.”

“If she has an owner, you need to get rid of her. The last thing we need is someone like a hunter finding us,” Brandon warned. He wiped his arms with his hands again and grew more irritated. The slobber stuck. “Why won’t it come off?!” he yelled.

Aaron laughed, and the dog barked triumphantly.

When Brandon had finally gotten a good amount of the slobber wiped off, the dog jumped at him again, knocking him to the ground beside his sword. Brandon held the dog back as much as possible as she licked his face, and Aaron died laughing. Every time the dog was pushed away, she’d come right back to Brandon and lick him. It was as if she were trying to get his forgiveness and wouldn’t stop until she did.

Aaron finally got a hold of himself and pulled the dog away. She barked at Brandon who gagged at the sight of the dog’s slobber smeared over his clothes and causing his hair to stick out at various places.

Aaron reached into his bag and pulled out a towel, “Try using this.”

Brandon snatched it from him, but the dog grabbed it from him and dropped it in front of Aaron.

Brandon reached to grab it, but the dog barked at him. Brandon flinched away. “Stay down.”

The dog wagged her tail and stood ready to pounce as Brandon backed away slowly.


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Thanks for posting chapter 2! :) I'll post three when I get the chance. ;)



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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Well it looks like we're dealing with our second set of characters in this one. A slightly more chaotic introduction for them it seems although I suppose the first one did also have a potential bomb involved so maybe its about equal after all. At any rate, its a lovely start here to this cast, it builds on the first chapter nice connecting them up and showcasing these characters very nicely too.

Anyway let's get right to it,

The portal formed and shaped until a loud bang like an explosion made it clear that the portal had finished, and something was about to come through.

As the portal hummed and stood steady, Aaron came first.

He stumbled as he tried to regain footing from stepping to the other side of the portal. The half dragon boy felt like he had just flown down a hundred-foot slide faster than he could ever fly when all he had done was just simply jump to get to the other side.


Ooooh okayyy..given how much of a normal family reunion we had in that previous chapter, this is almost a polar opposite scenario with a decidedly not human character just popping out of a straight up portal. Well that's quite the whiplash. Let's see where this is going to take us. I assume this is probably the second set of characters that will make up this novel.

After gaining his footing, he put his and the other travelers’ bags down and spun around just in time to help catch his human friend from stumbling to the ground. Brandon shakily stood straight and tried to keep his balance while Aaron’s steady arm stabilized him.

Slightly concerned, Aaron tried to meet his friend’s dizzy blue eyes with his own red eyes. “You good?”

Still dizzy from the trip, Brandon nodded and decided it was best to sit down. As he recovered his hand slipped to the hilt of his sword to make sure it hadn't gone missing during the trip. Aaron stayed next to him in case Brandon needed further help. As Brandon started to come back to a normal state, his head shot up like a cat’s, realizing that something was missing. Aaron realized it too, instantly thinking the same thing.


Oooh okay well we've got ourselves some humans too although it looks like humans potentially have a slightly harder time making it through that particular style of portal or at least Brandon doesn't seem to be taking it nearly as well as Aaron seemed to in the moment.

There were supposed to be three people, not just two on the other side of the portal.

Aaron walked to the entrance of the portal with his wings trembling in anxiousness as he became tempted to jump back in. “Where is she?

“She said she was coming right after me,” Brandon said. He got up and stepped beside his friend. “Are you going to go back in?”

Aaron hesitated and then shook his head. “Let’s give her another second. I don’t want to crash into my sister—if that’s even possible.” He pulled his friend back as he backed a few steps away himself. “Let’s step back in case she does come.”


Oooh well this is an early little spanner in the works. We love to see that, just spicing things up. Since this is functionally almost another first chapter, its a good little to throw in at the start to get us invested into these characters also quite early.

They waited no more than half a minute before Aaron's sister fell through the portal as it closed. She crashed to the ground with a cry of pain as her wing hit the ground in an awkward position. Aaron rushed over and tried to help her to her feet, but she refused. She didn’t want to move with how unsteady she was both mentally and physically. She put a hand up to stop her brother and fanned him away with it. “Leave me be.”

Brandon stood up and went over to her as she collapsed into a slouched lying position, the portal draining so much of her energy. Brandon put a gentle hand under her chin and made her look at him.


Well that definitely seems like the least successful landing of the three there and I am absolutely loving the attitude to just lie down there for a bit before attempting to move. That definitely seems like the best strategy to recover from that portal to be honest.

She turned away. “I…I’m fine. I just need some air.” She closed her red eyes and focused on taking in air into her drained lungs. The breeze played with her pretty long, blond hair as she sat there, but the air didn’t seem as relieving as it should be. The air wasn’t as crisp as she remembered it. There wasn’t a coolness to its touch.

Aaron saw her sister's troubled face. “What’s wrong?”

“The air.”

Brandon panicked and grabbed Ashlyn’s shoulders. “You can’t breathe?!”


Well that seems like a bit of a bigger problem than we were working with. I'm hoping this is just a slightly more dramatic statement than the actual problem because if that is in fact the actual problem we are going to be dealing with quite a serious one.

Ashlyn cracked an eye and winced as she flinched away from him. “I can if you quit strangling me,” she muttered, drawing her cloak closer around herself to cover her wings.

Slightly embarrassed, Brandon sat on his legs and ducked his head as he peered through his brown bangs at his pretty girlfriend. “Sorry.”

Aaron cocked his head to the side and narrowed his eyes at Ashlyn, not understanding. “What’s wrong with the air?” He straightened and took a deep breath and then shrugged. “It’s air. Maybe a little thick but we can all breathe.”


Hmm well it seems like that was just a little bit of a joke after all although it looks like it was inspired by the fact that this place somehow seems strange and different to them which given the whole portals and half dragons situation it isn't the most surprising note.

“Yeah, that’s what I mean. It’s not crisp or cool,” Ashlyn answered as she stood up. She looked around trying to find something familiar to her as Brandon stood beside her, helping her balance. She was incredibly tired. The simple jump through a portal felt like a year of energy pulled from her without remorse or mercy.

“The trees aren’t much different either,” Aaron observed, slowly beginning to understand what his sister was getting at. “Soarvania’s trees aren’t supposed to look like normal trees.”

Ashlyn shook her head. “No, they aren’t.”


Well that's quite the little observation. That suggest that maybe they are from some sort of Earth like place but were travelling to a different place that from the looks of things is not where they actually have managed to go ahead and end up in.

Most of Soarvania’s unmistakable trees were like willows but with darker wood and glittering leaves that seemed to have the colors gold or silver painted over them. Yet, there wasn’t a single one around.

Brandon looked around also in confusion. “Where are we, then?” He turned around to face Ashlyn and stared fiercely into her face. “Ash, where did you bring us?” he asked sharply.

Ashlyn looked back at Brandon. “I…I don’t know,” she replied fearfully. Her fear wasn’t a normal fear like someone would have towards spiders or the dark. It was a deeper, more dreadful fear of what could happen to them if someone found them. And she knew the others shared it too. Anyone who saw them –-two half dragon people and a regular human with a sword—would panic and attack, getting others to fight along with them.


Well this is new. I would expect most people would be scared and run from them, not the other way around like what we're seeing in this particular moment but perhaps something about what these people have faced in their lives makes them believe this to be the potential outcome. Well definitely setting things up to be quite the situation here. Let's see what more ends up happening here as they actually start to explore. Things have definitely gone a bit wrong here.

Aaron’s wings shook, but he tried to remain calm. If his sister sounded scared, there was a good reason for it. “So…we’re stuck somewhere we don’t know, and we can’t go back home. Not until your strength comes back?”

Ashlyn slowly nodded. “I don’t know what happened.”

Brandon got irritated. “Ash, what were you thinking about that diverted your attention?!” he yelled.

Ashlyn stepped away from Brandon, throwing her hands up in the air. “I have no idea!” Stepping a few more feet away, she turned her back to the boys, letting her hands fall to her sides and her wings drag on the ground as she felt defeat grip at her. “I know we aren’t on Airleeniar anymore.”


Ohh okayy well that's an interesting one. It seems they aren't quite from Earth either which I suppose matches the half dragon thing. Well for the moment it seems instead of trying to get to safety amidst all of this chaos they've focused on just trying to figure out how things went wrong here which might not be a great plan giving they are doing that through a bit of an argument.

“Anyone can realize that!” Brandon growled, throwing his hands up exasperatedly again. “What everyone doesn’t know is what you were doing that got us into this mess.”

Aaron watched the two argue. His gaze moved to the sky. Maybe if he got above the treetops he could figure out where they were. Maybe he could find a village, and they could ask someone where they were.

Aaron turned back to the two and tried to get their attention, “Hey, what if-”

“All you had to do was focus!” Brandon yelled, completely oblivious to his friend. “You’ve never lost focus before! What happened?”


Well it looks like those two siblings definitely get along pretty well there. Hopefully they aren't yelling at each other constantly like that. It didn't seem that way with how things went in the very first little section of this story, but well let's see what happens next.

Aaron tried again, “Guys-”

“I don’t know!” Ashlyn yelled louder, “Someone must have messed with my portal back at Airleeniar.”

“Guys, what if I-”

Brandon took a step closer at Ashlyn. “Who could have done that?!”

Aaron sighed in annoyance. People easily ignored him since half the time he wasn’t on track and tended to zone out. He crossed his arms and took a deep breath. “Guys!”


Well it certainly looks like there not going to be able too much progress unless Aaron manages to actually break through to these two and get some sort of reasonable discussion about how to survive this day manages to actually take place.

Both looked at him. “What?” They barked.

“Let’s just fly and see where we are,” he suggested as he took off.

“Aaron, no!!” Ashlyn yelled. Panic gripped her chest. What if someone saw him? She grabbed Brandon’s arm and pulled at his sleeve. “Brandon, do something!”

“What can I do?” he asked. Panic tinged his voice like Ashlyn’s.

“You can yell louder than me. Call out to him! I’m too tired to fly after him!”

Brandon yelled as loudly as he could, but Aaron was too far up to hear them. Aaron looked around for any sign of life, but they were in the middle of a forest with no one in sight. All he could see was a sea of green treetops.


Welp never mind looks like things have just immediately gone very very wrong, although thankfully I think that's our last clue to show that these people have in fact arrived right at the site of that cabin from the first chapter cause I'm gonna assume this is the big bird and the portal was the one that actually managed to create that big boom.

Disappointed, he dropped back down. Ashlyn smacked him on the back of his head. He winced and rubbed his head. “Ow! What was that for?” he asked, glancing out of his red eyes at his sister.

Ashlyn put her hands on her hips and looked him in the eye. “What stupid idea went through your head?” she asked angrily, staring unblinkingly into Aaron’s eyes, a mere reflection of her own flaming red eyes. “Are you trying to give us a heart attack?”

“No. I was thinking that if there’s someone nearby, we can ask where we are,” Aaron answered sheepishly. What was the harm in that?

Ashlyn crossed her arms, “And ask to get our wings chopped off in the process?”

“No, of course not! I was just-”


Well it looks like there is certainly a lot of trauma to be had in the kind of past they've had interacting with people. Those are some very specific fears that they seems to be having about what might happen. Well hopefully our friendly family from the other day isn't going to actually end up doing something like that. They don't seem the type.

“What you did was completely irresponsible and stupid.” Brandon said. “You can’t just take to the skies!” he exclaimed, staring seriously into Aaron’s face. “What if someone saw you? We have no idea where we are, Aaron. There could be people who want to hurt half dragons like you. Now, get your wings covered!”

“But no one did. We’re in a forest. There’s no one around!” Aaron exclaimed, pulling his cloak out of the bag he had left on the ground and draping it over his shoulders to cover his wings.

He lifted a hand and rubbed his head again, his gaze moving back to his sister. “Man, Ash, were you trying to knock my brain out or something?” He wouldn’t be surprised if a lump the shape of her hand had formed on his head.


Well this is definitely going to end up being quite a fun dynamic here. Although hopefully when some sort of actual danger is going to end up happening inevitable they hopefully yell at each other a tiny bit less and actually manage to get some things done.

Ashlyn didn’t find the comment amusing in the least bit. Her brother of all people should know the danger they were in. They were alone in a world they did not know with no one but themselves to trust. Back home people saw them as demons or monsters and constantly tried to harm them. Why should this world be any different?

“So, now what?” Brandon asked Ashlyn. “We can’t start a fire, or it’ll give us away to anyone nearby. And, to make matters worse, we don’t even know where we are.”

Ashlyn looked up at the sky and then down at her shadow. She turned back to Brandon. “We still have time left before the sun starts setting. Let’s at least look for some kind of food.” She swayed suddenly as a wave of tiredness pulled at her. Brandon caught her and helped her sit down. She frowned. “Or maybe you and Aaron can. I need to rest.”


Well it seems they've finally managed to somehow circle things back towards getting something productive done. That's definitely a bit of a good sign to see. I was getting worried that they were going to end up just freezing there until Lexi ended up running right to them because I'm sure Lexi has smelled them out at this point.

Aaron nodded in agreement and watched his little sister as she tiredly made her way to a large oak try to rest against.

He looked at Brandon with eagerness. “Well, we might as well get started. We’ll make more progress if the two of us go out.”

Brandon shook his head. After what Aaron just done, there was no way Brandon was going to take Aaron with him and put their lives in even more possible jeopardy. “Uh no. You stay here and keep watch.”

“Aw, but why? I can help.” Aaron tried, staring pleadingly at Brandon through his red eyes.


Well that seems like a much smarter plan the original one for both of them to leave. If Ashlyn is genuinely too tired to be doing much besides laying against a tree she should not be left to fend for herself alone especially in a forest where they are so afraid of people spotting them and causing harm.

Brandon sent him a warning look. “I said no. Stay there and don’t move. I’m not gonna have you take to the skies again.”

Sitting down, Aaron sighed and looked around when he heard barking in the distance. “Is that a wolf?”

“What?” Brandon asked, “I don’t hear anything.”

It got louder, and Ashlyn cracked an eye. “Now do you hear it?”

“It’s getting closer,” Aaron added as he stood up. He made his way to Ashlyn to protect her if whatever was coming was dangerous.


Well that I'm going to pretty safely assume is going to be Lexi although it is going to be very exciting to see if a dog actually presents some sort of different threat to these three than you would actually expect and just generally what Lexi's plan was in terms of actually investigation these three. Are we going to see a bit of a fight or is Lexi just that friendly of a god.

Brandon nodded. “Yeah. But where is it? This forest is just echoing it.”

As Brandon bent down to draw his sword, Aaron shouted, “Watch out!” A golden retriever jumped on Brandon, knocking him to the ground and covering him in layers of slobber from its constant kisses. Brandon called for help and reached for his sword lying on the ground beside him where it had fallen when the dog pounced on him.

Aaron laughed at his unfortunate friend. “Nope. You told me to stay right here.”

Brandon pushed the dog off and rolled onto his stomach to push himself up. The dog changed its target and ran to Aaron next.

Aaron laughed as he patted the friendly dog. “Look, she’s harmless.


Okayy well that honestly does seem quite typical when it comes to how a golden retriever goes about doing things so that's not exactly the most surprising thing to be running into. Now the question is going to be exactly how long Kassie and Jed are going to take to find Lexi and if maybe Lexi is going to instead drag these three back to that cabin.

Brandon shot the dog a glare and glanced down at his clothes. He gagged. The dog had covered him in layers of slobber that slowly began to drip off his arms which he had used to protect himself from the supposed attack.

Ashlyn and Aaron laughed.

Aaron cupped the dog’s face and smiled. “Where are you from, girl?”

The retriever was so happy to see people that she looked like she was smiling at Aaron and licked his face, her tail wagging so much that Ashlyn started to get hit by it. “Aaron, take her somewhere else before her tail starts to bruise me.”


Well it looks like we've got a clear bit of a divide there in terms of who is a fan of the dog and who is not a fan of the dog. It does look like they are still generally not going to do anything bad to the dog or vice versa though so that's still a decent outcome.

Aaron stood up and the dog followed him to a more open area where Brandon was. Brandon backed away with a deadly scowl. “This is why I prefer cats.” He muttered his various reasons as he wiped his arms with his hands. The dog ran over to him, but Brandon kept her down. “No! Bad dog! Stay down!”

The dog ran back to Aaron who dropped to a knee to pet her. “She’s not a bad dog. She’s just looking for a friend. She likes you.”

Brandon didn’t even bother to look at them. “Well I don’t! Keep the beast off me.”

“Hey, what if her owner is somewhere nearby?” Aaron suddenly asked, glancing up at Brandon. “Maybe they can help us figure out where we are.”

“How do you know she has an owner?” Ashlyn asked with her eyes shut.


Well it looks like we're slowly getting to a point where they're going to end up drifting towards that cabin here. I have a feeling that particular meeting is going to end up quite the powerful one. Let's see where else we end up going on this one.

“She’s too well kept to be wild.”

“If she has an owner, you need to get rid of her. The last thing we need is someone like a hunter finding us,” Brandon warned. He wiped his arms with his hands again and grew more irritated. The slobber stuck. “Why won’t it come off?!” he yelled.

Aaron laughed, and the dog barked triumphantly.

When Brandon had finally gotten a good amount of the slobber wiped off, the dog jumped at him again, knocking him to the ground beside his sword. Brandon held the dog back as much as possible as she licked his face, and Aaron died laughing. Every time the dog was pushed away, she’d come right back to Brandon and lick him. It was as if she were trying to get his forgiveness and wouldn’t stop until she did.


Well it looks like at least one person is still being mindful of the potential danger situation even as Brandon suffers there. The most interesting part though is how both of these people to be so vary of these mysterious hunters that both parties mentioned. Now I'm wondering what they've done to end up being held with such fear by people from two very different places.

Aaron finally got a hold of himself and pulled the dog away. She barked at Brandon who gagged at the sight of the dog’s slobber smeared over his clothes and causing his hair to stick out at various places.

Aaron reached into his bag and pulled out a towel, “Try using this.”

Brandon snatched it from him, but the dog grabbed it from him and dropped it in front of Aaron.

Brandon reached to grab it, but the dog barked at him. Brandon flinched away. “Stay down.”

The dog wagged her tail and stood ready to pounce as Brandon backed away slowly.


Well this is definitely shaping up to be quite something here. I have a feeling the dog is going to play a very key role in whatever chaos ends up ensuing amidst both groups when they I assume will inevitably meet here. Well, at any rate, its a nice moment to end on here, not as much of a cliffhanger as earlier or nearly as mysterious but the connection back to the first chapter does more than enough to make us very much want to read the next chapter.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall a lovely chapter to follow up what we had in the first part there. I'm really looking forward to seeing how these sets of characters are going to actually end up interacting and I am assuming that will in fact happen in the next chapter. Well I suppose there is only one way to find out. I'll see y'all in the next chapter.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Kate




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Hi there,

As I said in my review of the first chapter, I am very happy and especially excited that you and @KaiaJersaga are working together. To be honest, two heads are better than one. I really like the twist of magic in this chapter. Well, enough said. I will begin reviewing this brilliant piece.

The portal formed and shaped until a loud bang like an explosion made it clear that the portal had finished, and something was about to come through.

As the portal hummed and stood steady, Aaron came first.

He stumbled as he tried to regain footing from stepping to the other side of the portal. The half dragon boy felt like he had just flown down a hundred-foot slide faster than he could ever fly when all he had done was just simply jump to get to the other side.

After gaining his footing, he put his and the other travelers’ bags down and spun around just in time to help catch his human friend from stumbling to the ground. Brandon shakily stood straight and tried to keep his balance while Aaron’s steady arm stabilized him.

Slightly concerned, Aaron tried to meet his friend’s dizzy blue eyes with his own red eyes. “You good?”

Still dizzy from the trip, Brandon nodded and decided it was best to sit down. As he recovered his hand slipped to the hilt of his sword to make sure it hadn't gone missing during the trip. Aaron stayed next to him in case Brandon needed further help. As Brandon started to come back to a normal state, his head shot up like a cat’s, realizing that something was missing. Aaron realized it too, instantly thinking the same thing.

There were supposed to be three people, not just two on the other side of the portal.


Well, I must say. The way you introduced the portal and the half dragon boy and the other boy were very realistically written and very nicely described. I love your vivid details and imaginary descriptions, they really give more feeling to your story.

I think you did an great job getting a reader hooked to this story immeaditely! Because it sure as fire worked for me.

That last sentence is also so on point because that leaves a sense of wonder in the readers mind. I like that. Amazing job as a start!

Aaron walked to the entrance of the portal with his wings trembling in anxiousness as he became tempted to jump back in. “Where is she?

“She said she was coming right after me,” Brandon said. He got up and stepped beside his friend. “Are you going to go back in?”

Aaron hesitated and then shook his head. “Let’s give her another second. I don’t want to crash into my sister—if that’s even possible.” He pulled his friend back as he backed a few steps away himself. “Let’s step back in case she does come.”

They waited no more than half a minute before Aaron's sister fell through the portal as it closed. She crashed to the ground with a cry of pain as her wing hit the ground in an awkward position. Aaron rushed over and tried to help her to her feet, but she refused. She didn’t want to move with how unsteady she was both mentally and physically. She put a hand up to stop her brother and fanned him away with it. “Leave me be.”

Brandon stood up and went over to her as she collapsed into a slouched lying position, the portal draining so much of her energy. Brandon put a gentle hand under her chin and made her look at him.

She turned away. “I…I’m fine. I just need some air.” She closed her red eyes and focused on taking in air into her drained lungs. The breeze played with her pretty long, blond hair as she sat there, but the air didn’t seem as relieving as it should be. The air wasn’t as crisp as she remembered it. There wasn’t a coolness to its touch.

Aaron saw her sister's troubled face. “What’s wrong?”

“The air.”


Oehhhhhhhh........ Aaron has a little sister, thats so cute. I love that she is so fragile and bold also. Her description as an half human and a half dragon is also very nice and I can totally picture her infront of me. Amazing! I love blond hair, so yeah. I think you got that part totally right.

But I do was confused how is the air bad for her.....Maybe it will get explained later on. I need to have patience. Whoooooo

(How are you doin there Spidey, dont mind thats me talking to the spider under my bed in his cobweb, he blinked two times. I suppose he is doing just fine.

Brandon panicked and grabbed Ashlyn’s shoulders. “You can’t breathe?!”

Ashlyn cracked an eye and winced as she flinched away from him. “I can if you quit strangling me,” she muttered, drawing her cloak closer around herself to cover her wings.

Slightly embarrassed, Brandon sat on his legs and ducked his head as he peered through his brown bangs at his pretty girlfriend. “Sorry.”

Aaron cocked his head to the side and narrowed his eyes at Ashlyn, not understanding. “What’s wrong with the air?” He straightened and took a deep breath and then shrugged. “It’s air. Maybe a little thick but we can all breathe.”

“Yeah, that’s what I mean. It’s not crisp or cool,” Ashlyn answered as she stood up. She looked around trying to find something familiar to her as Brandon stood beside her, helping her balance. She was incredibly tired. The simple jump through a portal felt like a year of energy pulled from her without remorse or mercy.

“The trees aren’t much different either,” Aaron observed, slowly beginning to understand what his sister was getting at. “Soarvania’s trees aren’t supposed to look like normal trees.”

Ashlyn shook her head. “No, they aren’t.”

Most of Soarvania’s unmistakable trees were like willows but with darker wood and glittering leaves that seemed to have the colors gold or silver painted over them. Yet, there wasn’t a single one around.

Brandon looked around also in confusion. “Where are we, then?” He turned around to face Ashlyn and stared fiercely into her face. “Ash, where did you bring us?” he asked sharply.


Her name is Ashlyn. I really <3 that. And the fact that they are calling her Ash is also nice. I like that you made her the girlfriend of her brothers friend, Brandon. It adds this nice little twist to the story and the fact that Aaron is totally fine with it is also cool. It reminds me of a story I am writing where the best friend also falls for the sister.

Waiiiiiittttttttttt what!!!!!! Soarvania, is a country, I asume its a magic one. This is so cool. I really like Ash her comment on the fact that the trees are the same, it makes the story relatable.

So, if I understand this correctly, Ash can use and open portals. And now she transported herself, Aaron and Brandon towards Earth I suppose.

Ashlyn looked back at Brandon. “I…I don’t know,” she replied fearfully. Her fear wasn’t a normal fear like someone would have towards spiders or the dark. It was a deeper, more dreadful fear of what could happen to them if someone found them. And she knew the others shared it too. Anyone who saw them –-two half dragon people and a regular human with a sword—would panic and attack, getting others to fight along with them.

Aaron’s wings shook, but he tried to remain calm. If his sister sounded scared, there was a good reason for it. “So…we’re stuck somewhere we don’t know, and we can’t go back home. Not until your strength comes back?”

Ashlyn slowly nodded. “I don’t know what happened.”

Brandon got irritated. “Ash, what were you thinking about that diverted your attention?!” he yelled.

Ashlyn stepped away from Brandon, throwing her hands up in the air. “I have no idea!” Stepping a few more feet away, she turned her back to the boys, letting her hands fall to her sides and her wings drag on the ground as she felt defeat grip at her. “I know we aren’t on Airleeniar anymore.”

“Anyone can realize that!” Brandon growled, throwing his hands up exasperatedly again. “What everyone doesn’t know is what you were doing that got us into this mess.”

Aaron watched the two argue. His gaze moved to the sky. Maybe if he got above the treetops he could figure out where they were. Maybe he could find a village, and they could ask someone where they were.

Aaron turned back to the two and tried to get their attention, “Hey, what if-”

“All you had to do was focus!” Brandon yelled, completely oblivious to his friend. “You’ve never lost focus before! What happened?”

Aaron tried again, “Guys-”

“I don’t know!” Ashlyn yelled louder, “Someone must have messed with my portal back at Airleeniar.”

“Guys, what if I-”

Brandon took a step closer at Ashlyn. “Who could have done that?!”

Aaron sighed in annoyance. People easily ignored him since half the time he wasn’t on track and tended to zone out. He crossed his arms and took a deep breath. “Guys!”

Both looked at him. “What?” They barked.


A little conflict, I like that. It gives the story more realistic aspects. I also like the fact that boyfriend and Ash are arguing and Aaron is just trying to mingle in there, but isnt getting a single chance. Thats nice.

I also love that you made Ash confused and scared about what just happened, it gives deth to the story and makes it look like she is a real person with feelings.

“Let’s just fly and see where we are,” he suggested as he took off.

“Aaron, no!!” Ashlyn yelled. Panic gripped her chest. What if someone saw him? She grabbed Brandon’s arm and pulled at his sleeve. “Brandon, do something!”

“What can I do?” he asked. Panic tinged his voice like Ashlyn’s.

“You can yell louder than me. Call out to him! I’m too tired to fly after him!”

Brandon yelled as loudly as he could, but Aaron was too far up to hear them. Aaron looked around for any sign of life, but they were in the middle of a forest with no one in sight. All he could see was a sea of green treetops.

Disappointed, he dropped back down. Ashlyn smacked him on the back of his head. He winced and rubbed his head. “Ow! What was that for?” he asked, glancing out of his red eyes at his sister.

Ashlyn put her hands on her hips and looked him in the eye. “What stupid idea went through your head?” she asked angrily, staring unblinkingly into Aaron’s eyes, a mere reflection of her own flaming red eyes. “Are you trying to give us a heart attack?”

“No. I was thinking that if there’s someone nearby, we can ask where we are,” Aaron answered sheepishly. What was the harm in that?

Ashlyn crossed her arms, “And ask to get our wings chopped off in the process?”

“No, of course not! I was just-”

“What you did was completely irresponsible and stupid.” Brandon said. “You can’t just take to the skies!” he exclaimed, staring seriously into Aaron’s face. “What if someone saw you? We have no idea where we are, Aaron. There could be people who want to hurt half dragons like you. Now, get your wings covered!”

“But no one did. We’re in a forest. There’s no one around!” Aaron exclaimed, pulling his cloak out of the bag he had left on the ground and draping it over his shoulders to cover his wings.

He lifted a hand and rubbed his head again, his gaze moving back to his sister. “Man, Ash, were you trying to knock my brain out or something?” He wouldn’t be surprised if a lump the shape of her hand had formed on his head.

Ashlyn didn’t find the comment amusing in the least bit. Her brother of all people should know the danger they were in. They were alone in a world they did not know with no one but themselves to trust. Back home people saw them as demons or monsters and constantly tried to harm them. Why should this world be any different?


And here Aaron does it. He acts like an complete reckless fool or idiot I must say, but I like that. <333 The fact that Ash is asking Brandon to shout because he can shout louder, is very funny and realistic too. Great thinking along the way! You are doing an fabulous job over here!

Well, Aaron sure as hell deserved that comment from his sister. What if someone saw them, he would have chopped of their wings and cooked them alive. I really do not want to think about that.

OOOOHHHHHHH wait. I think I found something!!! (*rubbing my hands in excitement.) The giant big bird Kassie saw flying in the sky in the first chapter was Aaron!!!!!!!!!! Now it makes sense. I knew it! And the thunder thingie from the first chapter was the opening portal!!!!

Or am I wrong?

“So, now what?” Brandon asked Ashlyn. “We can’t start a fire, or it’ll give us away to anyone nearby. And, to make matters worse, we don’t even know where we are.”

Ashlyn looked up at the sky and then down at her shadow. She turned back to Brandon. “We still have time left before the sun starts setting. Let’s at least look for some kind of food.” She swayed suddenly as a wave of tiredness pulled at her. Brandon caught her and helped her sit down. She frowned. “Or maybe you and Aaron can. I need to rest.”

Aaron nodded in agreement and watched his little sister as she tiredly made her way to a large oak try to rest against.

He looked at Brandon with eagerness. “Well, we might as well get started. We’ll make more progress if the two of us go out.”

Brandon shook his head. After what Aaron just done, there was no way Brandon was going to take Aaron with him and put their lives in even more possible jeopardy. “Uh no. You stay here and keep watch.”

“Aw, but why? I can help.” Aaron tried, staring pleadingly at Brandon through his red eyes.

Brandon sent him a warning look. “I said no. Stay there and don’t move. I’m not gonna have you take to the skies again.”

Sitting down, Aaron sighed and looked around when he heard barking in the distance. “Is that a wolf?”

“What?” Brandon asked, “I don’t hear anything.”

It got louder, and Ashlyn cracked an eye. “Now do you hear it?”

“It’s getting closer,” Aaron added as he stood up. He made his way to Ashlyn to protect her if whatever was coming was dangerous.

Brandon nodded. “Yeah. But where is it? This forest is just echoing it.”


Thats right Aaron, your staying with your sister to make sure she is safe while she is resting (thats not the real reason, the real reason is just ot make sure that you dont do anything stupide or reckless AGAIN. But we are definitly not telling you that thats the real reason. hahaha)

EEEEEEEEEeeppppppppp, why is the freakin' forest echoin' Things are getting eepy creepy over here.

* me saying to my pillow: Come here Piley I need you close right now, be ready for anything my friend

As Brandon bent down to draw his sword, Aaron shouted, “Watch out!” A golden retriever jumped on Brandon, knocking him to the ground and covering him in layers of slobber from its constant kisses. Brandon called for help and reached for his sword lying on the ground beside him where it had fallen when the dog pounced on him.

Aaron laughed at his unfortunate friend. “Nope. You told me to stay right here.”

Brandon pushed the dog off and rolled onto his stomach to push himself up. The dog changed its target and ran to Aaron next.

Aaron laughed as he patted the friendly dog. “Look, she’s harmless.

Brandon shot the dog a glare and glanced down at his clothes. He gagged. The dog had covered him in layers of slobber that slowly began to drip off his arms which he had used to protect himself from the supposed attack.

Ashlyn and Aaron laughed.

Aaron cupped the dog’s face and smiled. “Where are you from, girl?”

The retriever was so happy to see people that she looked like she was smiling at Aaron and licked his face, her tail wagging so much that Ashlyn started to get hit by it. “Aaron, take her somewhere else before her tail starts to bruise me.”

Aaron stood up and the dog followed him to a more open area where Brandon was. Brandon backed away with a deadly scowl. “This is why I prefer cats.” He muttered his various reasons as he wiped his arms with his hands. The dog ran over to him, but Brandon kept her down. “No! Bad dog! Stay down!”

The dog ran back to Aaron who dropped to a knee to pet her. “She’s not a bad dog. She’s just looking for a friend. She likes you.”

Brandon didn’t even bother to look at them. “Well I don’t! Keep the beast off me.”


Ay dios mio, Lexi is alive!!! Yesss.....

For a second I thaught some weird hunter took her and skinned her alive and made a coat from her fur and cooked her meat to eat her or he porbably grilled her is he was cold.

Thanks god, that did not happen. Lexi is alive and well, phew...
*me wiping sweat from my forehead

Oh thats funny,
the way that she kinda like jumped on boyfriend there. I laughed.

Great description over here too!

“Hey, what if her owner is somewhere nearby?” Aaron suddenly asked, glancing up at Brandon. “Maybe they can help us figure out where we are.”

“How do you know she has an owner?” Ashlyn asked with her eyes shut.

“She’s too well kept to be wild.”

“If she has an owner, you need to get rid of her. The last thing we need is someone like a hunter finding us,” Brandon warned. He wiped his arms with his hands again and grew more irritated. The slobber stuck. “Why won’t it come off?!” he yelled.

Aaron laughed, and the dog barked triumphantly.

When Brandon had finally gotten a good amount of the slobber wiped off, the dog jumped at him again, knocking him to the ground beside his sword. Brandon held the dog back as much as possible as she licked his face, and Aaron died laughing. Every time the dog was pushed away, she’d come right back to Brandon and lick him. It was as if she were trying to get his forgiveness and wouldn’t stop until she did.

Aaron finally got a hold of himself and pulled the dog away. She barked at Brandon who gagged at the sight of the dog’s slobber smeared over his clothes and causing his hair to stick out at various places.

Aaron reached into his bag and pulled out a towel, “Try using this.”

Brandon snatched it from him, but the dog grabbed it from him and dropped it in front of Aaron.

Brandon reached to grab it, but the dog barked at him. Brandon flinched away. “Stay down.”

The dog wagged her tail and stood ready to pounce as Brandon backed away slowly.


This is a very nice ending of chapter two. I really like the connection you made between Lexi, the dog who loves Brandon and Brandon who does not love Lexi. I think it is very funny and it makes your story sweet.

Overall, this is a very nice chapter two of the story Magic. I am very happy to see that the title got explained a bit in this chapter. I am also very glad no hunter grilled Lexi and that she is alive and well. I like your sibling relationship and the over protective boyfriend relationsship too. I love your arguing part as I said before it adds more depth to the story and it makes the story feel more realistic and relatable. You have an very nice writing style, its not to easy nor complex. Amazing job in one word!

Keep up the amazing work! Have a nice day or night!

Magically yours,
Rinisha




Kaia says...


Hey, Rinisha!
Kaia here. Just wanted to say thanks for reviewing our book. Put all the credit on @MercedesBlue. She did most of the writing here, and of course she pulled it off nicely. ;)

Hope you have a wonderful day!
-Kaia



NadyaStatham says...


ofc. yw.




If you pick up a starving dog and make him prosperous, he will not bite you; that is the principal difference between a dog and a man.
— Mark Twain