So CRUEL!
You'd wandered 'round,
The faceless crowds,
feeling empty,
nothing's sound,
within you,
in yo-uh-uu.
Lifeless cask
you float about,
mindless drone
nothing's right,
for you,
for yo-uh-uu.
Then you met this great man,
he grabbed your hand
And took you to
The moon,
The mo-uh-oon
From the start,
they told you,
you were,
Always gonna lose,
And for the longest time
you believed them
their words rang in your ears,
they were all deceiving.
He wanted
to take you
on a trip,
far away
from home,
from ho-uh-ome
You cashed out all your
savings,
left town
with his old Ford
with his old Fo-ord
From the start,
they told you,
you were,
Always gonna lose,
And for the longest time
you believed them
their words rang in your ears,
they were all deceiving.
all deceiving.
He took out his mighty .44
And aimed it at your sleeping form,
It's true,
He never loved you.
There's no tears,
in his eyes,
As he pulls the trigger
to end your life
it's true,
You were born to lose.
From the start,
they told you,
you were,
Always gonna lose,
It's the truth.
And for the longest time
you believed them
their words rang in your ears,
Not one was deceiving.
none deceiving.
(bang)
Hi! I didn't expect this song to have such a dark ending! Although the song doesn't have a melody or rhythm up here with the lyrics I can imagine the melody to be lyrical and slow- the sort I would want to relax too so the ending was so unexpected.
I just want to make two suggestionz:
The title of the song 'born to lose,' and the stanza where you mention
..I think you could be clearer here and clarify who the victim is losing too...is it fate? or the lover in the song?From the start,
they told you,
you were,
Always gonna lose,
From the start,
they told you,
you were,
Always gonna lose,
And for the longest time
you believed them
their words rang in your ears,
they were all deceiving.
all deceiving.
Hello, Dino here for a short review!
I like the dark theme you are portraying throughout here. Personally, the title kind of showed that it was going to be a dark theme and you showed that with sort of little description about the narrator.
Another thing I like about this poem is the repetition throughout the whole thing. I think it does give this lyric poem more of a definition towards sadness. One thing I would like to know is why the narrator is willing to kill himself. I'm assuming it because of romance went sour and they decided to kill themselves because of that. Unless I'm totally missing the point of this lyrics but I think you should infer why he did so.
There's no tears,
in his eyes,
As he pulls the trigger
to end your life
it's true,
You were born to lose.
Well, heck. That got a lot darker than I expected.
That said, I loved the (bang) at the end. What a way to end. Yikes. I feel like with the right melody this would be the kind of beautifully haunting song I would love, even though everyone else would be like, "WHY do you only like sad songs???" just like they always ask.
So the main thing I wanted to say has to do with this.
left town
with his old Ford
He took out his mighty .44
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