Young Writers Society

Awwww, I like this poem! It uses lots of onomatopoeia and is highly relatable for anyone who wants to get another couple minutes. I also like the rule of three -- you had the snooze go for three times, until finally the banging sound commences, which kind of ends the poem on a loud note. It reminds me of the cute kid poems that I read to my kids, which also makes me happy. Very nice!

I dooo sort of wonder who says, "Wake up!" But, ultimately, that isn't very important overall to the poem, so that's okay, lol.

Well done!

This was cute! I enjoyed the realism and simplicity of it. It kind of reminds me of a where the sidewalk ends poem. You really put me in the shoes and headspace of someone who doesn't want to get up but is rudely and roughly awakened by something external. While I do think you could have pushed for a little more imagery and substance, it's not necessary for it to be effective. Maybe next time you can think about the touch, taste, smell, and other senses associated with this experience.

This was cute! I enjoyed the realism and simplicity of it. It kind of reminds me of a where the sidewalk ends poem. You really put me in the shoes and headspace of someone who doesn't want to get up but is rudely and roughly awakened by something external. While I do think you could have pushed for a little more imagery and substance, it's not necessary for it to be effective. Maybe next time you can think about the touch, taste, smell, and other senses associated with this experience.