Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So this was a really short story that you got there. I'm not sure if it connects to anything else because I can't seem to find a connection between this one and the previous labelled with this name. But maybe I'm just not getting it...I am stupid. Anyway besides that appears to be a nice little skit. Not a lot happening plotwise but there appears to be a tiny bit of character in there with some emotion so there's that.
Anyway let's get right to it,
My question was soon answered when I stepped into my classroom, Near the front sat Jonathon. What was worse I was seated right next to him, he gave me a smile as I walked by him. I could feel my heart start to beat and my cheeks flush, i forced a smile and sat down.
Okay not a bad start at all. You get a sense of the emotion right away which is always nice to have at the beginning.
What a swell day I thought. "Um crystal?" I looked around for the location of the voice, it was jonathon. "Yeah?" "Do you have an Eraser?" he asked. I nodded and as I leaned down to get it from my bag,"Wham!" I had hit my head on my desk. Of all things I thought mortified. "Are you ok?" he asked me. I simply nodded and found the eraser he had asked for. Great, not only was I dumb I was also a klutz. He looked at me and said "that sure is a nasty bumb on your head, are you sure your ok?" "Oh im just as swell as I can be." I said trying to hide my red cheeks from him. "Um there is something else Id like to ask you" He said running a hand through his dark hair. "Would you like to go for an ice cream soda after school with me?" Oh my goodness, jonathon had just asked me out.
If you looks beyond the missing capital letters and commas, I'm not going to point those out since someone already did
Aaand that's it for this one.
Overall: It's a nice little story. Very simple without any sort of message or anything but it was a fun little thing to read and I enjoyed it.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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