Hi! Oliver here to review <3I'm not going to be nitpicky about punctuation and whatnot because you're a seasoned poet and you know what you're doing. I just have some overall remarks.To begin with, the title is apt and fitting for the poem. In relation to the poem's contents, it gives off the sense of the soul being battered.Right out of the gate you have a solid simile. By relating the soul to a half-eaten pan of cornbread, you're talking about how the soul was consumed without thought and then abandoned. It gives some thought as to how the narrator was treated.The simile is very well conveyed. However, the lines
when it is remembered these / pieces and crumbs, are soon / discarded to the depths of the / greatest hell
Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a review for you on this lovely day. Let's get to it. I'll start by saying this was a really great poem you have written here. it was very touching, and I loved reading it. To be honest I don't know how to make a poem this good so I think you have done a splendid job. But I did see a few things that can be fixed, but I will get to those in a sec. I also don't think you over did this poem, it was just long enough, it didn't feel stretched out. That is sadly something I do to my poems, so it's nice to read a poem which has been written really well and I can get some tips. So that's really good. Now down to the real review. Now this this something that can be fixed really easily. As I was reading I saw that you didn't have any capitol letters so I'm here to help you a little with that.Let me show you what I mean.So i'm going to take your first few lines and show you.
my soul is like a half-eaten castiron pan of corn bread. itwas once loved but when it grew stale, it was abandoned to the darkness of the cupboard. and
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