Hey @KaiRy
I'm here to leave you a review.
First impression:
This is is very nicely written and I think it's a lovely piece. I like the fact that she gave her journal a name, Kitty. Suchanadorablenametoo!
I love the fact that it's not to long, but also not to short. Just in between and perfect. I kind of feel sorry for her that the government thinks she's bad, even though she's very sweet and nice. But I guess that are people, right? If people are not familiar with something they're going to start judging. Everything has to go with the rules. No exceptions. No new things. And definitly no magic. Why are people doing that? Just give it a chance and you'll see that it isn't that hard. A change is good sometimes. Why can't they see that in? Fear of losing. That's also one of those thingies. People think everything that is weird or different is bad. Or just nog good. It just can't be that way, they think. Well' let me tell you this: They are very very very wrong, my friend. What is actually up with them? Why can't people be different? Or why don't they just try and understand the witch. They are not even trying. And then they say, "Yes, yes. The goverment is here for it's people, rest assured people you're in great hands." My foot! Just stop already. They don't give a damn about their people. It's just about the motivation or the votes of the people.
About your story:
I think it's very nicely written, you have an amazing writing style and your work reflects that too. I love that the witch didn't attack them even though she has magic/ or is more powerful than them, she stood down. That reflects even more of what a good person she is. Your pacing of the story (the flow) is also really great.
The ending is very sad and I hope to read a second part very soon. This was really interesting and sweet. You did an awesome job, keep writing!
Magically yours,
Rinisha
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