Seeking the words to release
this jumbled block of heaviness
make sense of this entropy
madness
egress
toomanywords
toomanywords
And I've searched from Tibet to Hampstead and back
Found nothing but nothing to cushion the lack
I circle silence, hoping it will spell my name
When I find it I will know where my place is
Ineedsomewheretobe
somewheretobe
nospaceforme
I find everything but what I meant to say,
words I never knew I'd lost until today
and I am the mssng vwl in my own name
The alphabet slips from my hands
the hamster wheel is broken
and I'm stcku wtcahing this scrambled lief
as it rolls awa
a
a
a
a
a
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I really like the structure of your poem. The crossed out words and the “toomanywords” part.
And this sounds so good: “I circle silence, hoping it will spell my name”
And aww ☹ “nospaceforme“
Oh I also really like the way that you have basically everything but what you truly need, all the words but not the ones that matter. I like this too: “ I never knew I'd lost until today” And the missing vowel and oh man oh man, I just rly like all this @.@
Perfect end for the poem too! Thank you for sharing!
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Hiya, JustMeBeingMe! I stumbled across this poem and hoped to give it a review! Hope you don't mind!
To start, this strikes me as an incredibly creative theme for a poem. The jumbled words, the search for what to say—I feel like it captures that concept so many people have of being at a loss for words, especially when you're trying to express yourself or your ideas. Yet in the alternative, staying silent, there's a feeling of being lost, searching for belonging in a pre-existing script instead of making your own, maybe? The core theme, at least to me, was just the feeling of being displaced. *ahem* But of course, that's just how I was able to understand them, and sorry if I'm off!
For recommendations, I've got nothing! This really is great as-is!
One of my favorite things about this poem is your creative choice of formatting, jumbling the words. Scrambled where you want to show that feeling of chaos and confusion, unspaced to give that claustrophobic fear of having nowhere to go, and then the train of thought just completely derailing at the end there. Super cool!
I also really liked these lines here:
These lines, at least to my understanding, just gave this sense of incompleteness and delayed realization, like you're missing something, or worse yet lost it, and didn't even realize it until it was too late. And putting that in the theme of the wordsearch, "losing the vowel in my own name," making it rigid, mechanical-sounding, unpronounceable...Love it!! So many ways to interpret this.
Overall, this was such a lovely and creative poem! Nicely done!
"They who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."
"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”
"I would define, in brief, the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of Beauty."
accidentally submitted the same review twice, sorry! Do keep the poems going!
Thanks so much for ur review *follows* <3
Greetings! I'm a big fan of the concept and execution of this poem. I too get lost in my own writing searching for the right way to...phrase and explain ideas: until they decide to jump out. Poems feel messy because of that, and the layout and format of this poem definitely implements that well. This poem feels like I am visiting your brain, and I love that!