Published March 24, 2012
Sunlight splays her gold fingers
through the window.
I light a cigarette. Smoke bellows
from my lips, a ghostly
canon fire.
With each drag, I perform
movements with my mouth,
to give smoke new life, as it leaves
my lungs.
Smoke is a gypsy dancer. A long
ribbon of grey, rising up
before my face,
trying to seduce me.
Blinding me with beauty.
She hoops and swirls
between solid beams of sun,
a mesmerising phantom.
The gypsy dancer is killing me.
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