Young Writers Society

Hiya Kate! Would you consider listing this under the "chicken" genre? That way it will be easily found with your other classic chicken poem!

Hello HarryHardy,
I like funny poetry! (especially since it has chickens in it!)

1. The rhyming scheme really helped with the light hearted mood. I believe it was an AA, BB and CC rhyming scheme.
2. The lines themselves followed a 3 short and 1 long syllable count. Which in themselves were short and concise.

and at two months old,
he found himself sold,
to be made into a roast,

Hey! MapleWay here with a quick review!

I'm honestly not sure how I got to this poem but when I saw the title I simply had to check it out. It made me laugh so hard so great job with that! And I also liked the rhyme scheme. The humor kinda reminded me of a limerick which is a good thing since I like limericks.

Anyways great job! Plz write more poetry because this one was great!

Hey Harry, let's check out this poem!

So first off - congratulations on diving into the poetry, glad you tried this out!

Meaning
The poem was pretty straight forward it's a good story poem with a clear plot/conflict. There's a chicken, he likes to cluck, then he gets sold to be a roast. RIP. One thing this short little story is missing is a reason to care about Mr. Cluck Dicken - > as readers we aren't given quite enough reason to care about this little chicken. Some suggestions would be to give us a bit more background on the chicken - > what does he look like, what are his hobbies, his dreams, his motivations etc. Things like that will give the poem a bit more substance so that you can really pull heartstrings by the end of the piece.

Sound/Form
Overall it looks like you capitalization & punctuation choices were consistent and effective, no issues there. I wouldn't change anything with that.

You had a standard AA, BB, CC, DD rhyme pattern and none o the rhymes seemed forced per-say but they a bit dr. seuss-like Although for a sort of light short poem like this, I wouldn't say that's a bad thing.

One place as far as form that you might find improvement in is keeping those line lengths a bit more consistent. Most of the lines seemed pretty good - but I think the last one got a little long and the wording seemed a tad awkward. -> Maybe the last line could have a different rhyming word or be phrased in a different way? "toast" maybe.

Overall you've got a nice pleasant short little poem, you should keep writing them!

- alliyah

Happy RevMo!

Hi HarryHardy,
I’m here with a review. I like your poem as it’s pretty funny but there isn’t much of a melody to it. I know you probably didn’t want to add that as this poem is supposed to be only funny. I do still believe that adding it might make it a little more pleasant to read. For now, reading it I felt like falling down the stairs. I would also like to say that in the fourth line you didn’t add a comma like in the others. Maybe you could add it?
I hope my review helps you and didn't offend you in any way,
MoonIris

Hello, @HarryHardy. It's 10:57 pm here, so here's a late night, minute review of your poem.

1. I immediately thought that Cluck Dicken was the chicken form of Charles Dickens. That made this all the funnier.
2. I like your coupling rhymes, but the "roast/boast" pair seems a little forced.
3. If you could make your 3rd line longer and/or your 4th line shorter, I think your poem would be a little more balanced.

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!