Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to review my very first official poem. Umm....don't be too mad if I leave a horrible review...it has been a while since I did anything to a poem.
First Impression: So on first glance this has a pretty cool rhyme to it that I can see (this means it is very easy to see) and I think its just a nice and very straightforward thing. Also my brain is not overheating from trying to decipher it so that's also a plus for me.
Anyway let's get right to it,
I once tasted a good ole' broccoli,
it tasted speck-tacular
like a miniature tree.
Well, I haven't really
ever tasted a tree
Just a good ole' brocolli.
Deep-fried in oil,
recreating a forest fire,
God, my head is like 'monopoly'.
I wish it was, really though,
like the game, a business
that would help me make a name.
Become a rock and rap star,
own a crane, so I can
Demolish everyone's pride and fame.
Then I'd think, "how'd
All this come to be?"
'Twas all a good ole' broccoli.
Right so first of all that looks like you've got some unnecessary capitals I think. (Correct me if I'm wrong and probably refer to this thing I found for some proper knowledge on it)
And that's all I can see as something that's a little off. Other than that the punctuation seems okay and autocorrect tells me that except for that one highlighted word everything else is spelled correctly which I think is a good thing.
Umm the message is again pretty clear and neat.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Umm...not sure what to say here besides umm...for my first poem in like literally three years it was pretty nice. Great Job!!
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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