Hi!
This poem while being simple is very powerful and hard- hitting. The straightforward nature of the language you used really brought out the emotions in every single line.
While I do wish there was more to the poem, the short length wonderfully brings out the unexpectedness and sudden nature of the situation.
Another thing i noticed was the change in tense from past to present in the last lines which really engages the reader and adds a lot of depth to your writing.
Overall i really liked this poem and i look forward to seeing more poems like this!
Keep writing : )
Points: 30
Reviews: 8
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