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I don't understand why I was born this way
Why is life so confusing?
Why does it hurt so badly?
Why are my eyes so empty?
But most of all
Why do I have these voices?
Is it because I took them from someone?
Why are they screaming in my head so loudly?
Why are they urging me to do things that aren't so holy?
What I don't understand is
Why they work together to destroy me
Why do they keep trying to make me something I'm not?
Why do I keep putting up with it?
Why am I so scared?
Why am I so attracted to these things?
Why am I still listening to it?
I don't understand why I was born this way
Hi there friend, Ellie here!
Reading this was like a breath of fresh air that I desperately needed. I love it when other peoples poetry lets me and enables me to be able to truly connect and feel this way. Thank you for writing this. I can tell that this is something that may not only be written about yourself, but can be applicable to any person who reads it. This asks questions that we all have, with boldness and strength and confidence.
Pleased to have read this! Please write more 
Ellie-Mae
As soon as I saw this, I could totally relate. It adds a sense of confusion, hysteria to things that you can't control. You can't understand what these things are that haunt your life, but you know what they are. You know what it is but it's that sense of being restrained and held back. It's done in a very innocent and naive way, but that really just adds to the poem because as I said, it gives that hysteria. It's like finding yourself for the first time and confronted by all of these issues and question.
Firstly, could you answer these? Maybe you could have a bit where you reflect and you calm that hysteria and it goes from confusion to hesitant acceptance. The bit where you know, and you stop asking why, but you just know, and it overwhelms you. This would give the impression of acknowledgement to the reader: Why are my eyes so empty? Because I am empty? (This is just an example obviously)
This is up to you however I think that this would develop and extend on the emotions within this poem.
These are just minor points:
Why is life is so confusing
Why are they urging me to things that aren't so holy?
What understand most is
i love the poem but you could of change it hurt so badly but the story was good.
you did so good with the story but half of it was like about you to me.
it sounds to me you describe yourself in the half story.
but the poem was kinda good through i love to read everyday.
thxs you got this poem about yourself that's good you might be in first place with your poem.
i love this poem wanna see a another like this.
your poem was about your life i love it i hope we see a poem like this again one day.
the part why i am so scared makes us so sadðŸ˜
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