Ah I wasn't sure what I'd encounter in an article on Mac & Cheese, but you actually made this topic very sweet and nostalgic. The smooth combination of historical facts plus a nice range of personal anecdotes really makes the piece striking and interesting.
One aspect I'd critique is I'm not sure what exactly the "point" or thesis of this article/essay is. Is the point that as the title claims "everyone likes mac and cheese"? I'm not sure you've made that point, as your conclusion goes back to America, that everyone in America likes mac and cheese. Also I feel like although the essay makes a good point for why it is an integral staple to American cuisine with world-wide ties, I don't think it's fair to say everyone likes mac and cheese, because it's just not factually true! haha, as with any food item, you've always got those picky eaters who will never go for it.
If the point of the essay is just to be informative on the background of mac and cheese and why it's important to you, I feel like the closing sentence should relate back to that aspect rather than the America claim. Figuring out what you want the central "point" of the essay to be is going to make the whole piece more focused, and I think can mainly be done by adding a thesis that links up to a conclusion.
I liked your usage of lots of sources, I would note that sometimes for a formal essay blogs aren't really appropriate sources without giving the blog-author or publisher's qualifications, but that might not be a problem if this is just a casual essay/blog you're writing for fun.
Another critique is that I noticed you consistently write "mac'n'cheese" in your article, but referred to the dish only as "macaroni and cheese" in the title, this felt a little inconsistent and I wondered why it was changed from the title to the piece itself. You could have a sentence that macaroni and cheese is colloquially called "mac'n'cheese" to clarify, or maybe even change your title to just "mac'n'cheese". I felt like the order of paragraphs and information made sense, I thought it was a good opener to start on a personal story to draw the reader in; though I do think this sentence could be improved "Partially because there weren't many other kid-friendly dishes on the menu, but also because it was really good." <- it feels like this sentence is your thesis so far? Or the reason you're choosing to write a whole essay on mac'n'cheese, and it being "kid-friendly" and "really good" are just not strong enough descriptions to warrant the rest of the essay. Maybe you could dig into the emotional impact of the mac'n'cheese a bit more, or make a claim for why it is so important besides just being "good" .
I didn't really have a lot of grammar critiques, there weren't any spelling issues that jumped out, so you did a nice job editing this - the whole piece felt very polished. On the citations, you are missing a date for the Wright Source - if there isn't a date listed for when it was written, you can at least put the date it was accessed from the internet.
Nice work! This was a fun essay to read!
- alliyah
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