Hello! DragonNoir here for a review!
I must say, this is quite deep. I did however see many mistakes, but they were mostly repetitions. Firstly, one must always make an 'I' capital if one is talking about themselves. Secondly, 'its' and 'it's' are two different words. If a kennel belongs to a dog, it is no "it's kennel" but "its kennel". Generally, if a noun possesses another noun, usually we put an " 's " on the end. That is, unless there already is an 's' on the end, then we just add an apostrophe.
On a more positive note, I really like the effective use of repetition of the sentence "Why is this world like this?" and others of this sort. As well as this, your rhyming pattern was great and your vocabulary is awesome too.
Overall, an amazing piece of poetry, but it wouldn't hurt to work on possessive nouns.
I hope this review helped!
Points: 350
Reviews: 84
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