First we see a featured piece called Okay, and then I am not okay! Okay seems to be a popular word, understandably.
I definitely understand where this poem is coming from, and I think most people do, too. Sometimes, there's nothing you can do to change the day and you've just got to live it out and wait for the next to be better, even if you don't believe it will be.
In a more critical light, I almost felt like this poem was going in circles. I got the feeling that you wrote this when you were in a bad mood, as you said below in a response to a review. The reason I felt like this was going in circles is because there was no particular end to it, or reason for your not-okayness. I feel like you were just in one of those frustrated moods when you wrote this, where you yourself are going in circles and simply can't be okay. I get that, and that's the feeling I got from this poem. However, if you wanted to add more emotion to this poem to highlight reasons why you feel this way, that would be great too .
The end, especially, felt a little weird to me. You spent the entire poem elaborating on how you are not okay, but at the end you simply come to terms to it and say, in a way, that you are okay. Or at least that you are okay with the fact that you are not okay, which confused me a little bit.
Anyway, I do understand how it feels to feel this way (as I have repeatedly stress continuously ;D), so I guess I can't really get my super critical eye on for this particular poem. My main piece of advice is to elaborate on this a bit more on that frustrating feeling of nothing being okay, no matter what, as you did in these stanzas:
No pills
no therapists
nothing can change that
And perhaps
that's for the best
I am not okay
and that is okay
with me
I'm not sure if that was much of a review, but I hope I helped in some way.
Overall rating: 8/10
Keep writing!
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