This is absolutely beautiful. The title is perfect, and the whole poem is enchanting. I love the rhymes that you've scattered throughout the poem- not in stanzas or with a sense of tidiness, but wild like the trees you describe. This is an incredible poem, especially from a not-poet.
"In the mournful forest that nobody knows lives a sorrowful man that nobody sees" UGH these lines. I love the way you initially weave the man into the trees by describing him as in them, yes, but by establishing their shared sense of mystery. I want to know more oh my lord. I want to know more about the man and the trees.
"His boots of the earth and bow of the wind, his heart in the oak and his body therein" this line has such a good rhythm. It's really, really beautiful. I don't even have anything to say about this I just want to read it every day for the rest of my life.
"But deeds that are done are paid for in kind, and the poor old ranger kept those in mind who had guarded his grave for years." This is genuinely tragic??? the trees DIED. AH you've created such an incredible story with so few words. You can feel the tragedy and sorrow this man feels, the gratefulness to the trees and their sacrifice.
After that line, in the next few paragraphs, the transition from calm and sorrowful to angry and vengeful is very smooth but sudden, like the death of the trees. I want to see the men face their due. I want to watch this man and help him avenge his trees!
"By bow of wind and arrow of thorn" The reflection to earlier in the poem really shows the shifted mood, where before he had boots and a heart full of tree and now he just wants vengeance. This is tragic. I'm in love with it. Bless you for writing this. I have zero bad things to say about this poem.
Points: 390
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