Hello there! I figured I would keep up with a couple more of your works in the name of Review Month. Since this seems like a playful or cute idea to write about, I won't go too much into the analysis of this and rather going over a few different things that I liked from this. I think it's fun that you got help from your friends too.
So, that beginning. I think that even with silly works starting off with an action scene that isn't what it seems like is a bit of a tired trope. Plenty of novels rely on that kind of hook to get noticed which I can understand, but I don't like it as much when it's otherwise a different kind of story, let alone that actually sparring can come up in a fine story not based around action scenes or fighting and things like that. I think I wish this could have just started with Taren's own thoughts at the very beginning since this leads the reader better into what kind of story this was going to be.
Past that, I do think this has a decent kind of humorous scene, although I'm not sure if this kind of joke is too appropriate on a website now known quite while for its appeal to younger readers. Maybe no one caught on to that idea in 2005 to ask any questions. The good nature of everyone in this is nice to see and the fact that they're friendly amongst each other despite being able to handle jokes doesn't happen often enough in my opinion.
Overall, I think this is a fun exercise and it's fun to get others involved to get through writer's block rather than to stare at blank pages. As I've seen quite a few other stories by you over the forums, I imagine that this is one kind of cure. Good for you, and good for this website.
See ya.
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