Hey blueflood,
welcome to yws and i'm glad your posting already, i have read a couple other reviews and have gathered that you meant this to be a flash fiction, as far as i know of there isn't a section for that.
I really enjoyed this though at times it was a bit disjointed but overall it flowed quite nicely.
I understand the meaning behind this as social status usually messes up friendships or sometimes people in general. I thought it was quite nice how you used the flower to represent their friendship which at the being was a beautiful thing and then it turned sour and died.
i think the ending could have been better instead of randomly using a chipmunk highlight what had happened to the flower you could of said that the boy goes back to the place of the flower to discover that it had withered and died.
But overall i am quite happy with this piece and its good for your first piece on yws.
Thank you for reading this review, yours sincerely crystalrose
Points: 50
Reviews: 9
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