Young Writers Society

hello! momo here with a review :)

oh. my. gosh. ellie. this poem hurt my SOUL. it's so good and way too relatable. your words are so carefully crafted and everything just fits. i'm not making much sense but this poem is amazing and that's what matters haha. i have a few notes, so let's get into it!

Imperfect, I am, a canvas of flaws,

Imperfect I am, a canvas of flaws
or
Imperfect; I am a canvas of flaws

Your words, like bitter arrows, sought to wound,
Made me question the essence of my very sound,

Thank you, for showing me it's not my cross to bear,

Thank you for unveiling the strength within,
For teaching me that self-love is where I begin,
I stand tall, my life too precious to despise,
Your words may wound, but my spirit defies.

I rise above, a declaration: I am not undone.

Wow! Now where talking! I loved it, it's so vibrant. Took my breath away as it did with the words i thought i'd held to describe this piece of work, really. You can actually watch it's protagonist sprinting across battlefield, successfully fighting for it's wounded life, amazing!

hii just wanna say that I love this poem hit me right in the feels also made me think a lot about me and inspired me to wanna write poetry Thank you!!

What a beautifully written poem, I thought it deserved a comment on top of the like. There's some really powerful lines in here... I especially love:

I am a symphony of growth, emerging from the past.

Hi! I love the way it rhymes and I love the general theme of the poem. It's the kind of poem I can relate to, and it's really uplifting. You've made it straightforward without layers of metaphorical meaning so it's easy to understand. I like that. My favourite part is definitely the last two quatrains.

Hey there! I really liked that you followed a rhyme scheme. Not many people (Unfortunately, even myself) use one when writing poetry in more free-form or simple stanzas. I also enjoyed the seeming contrast of the iron or grit within oneself and the 'self love', then going on to prove that is not a contradiction. This piece resonates with me so, so much. One thing that I noticed, and again, I am often guilty of this as well, is that you use a lot of 'excess' language. One thing that I have learned is that with poetry, you want to remove as much of the meaningless words, words like 'and' and 'to'. But overall, I really like the poem! The constant use of metaphor with the "I am" statements really drove home your point.

Howdy hey! Gengar here, not leaving a review, but just wanna leave a message:

I’m really sorry that all of this happened to you. You seem like a really nice person and it’s unfortunate that some people aren’t as nice as you 🩷🩷🩷🩷 i hope that things improve for you!