Hey there! I usually don't like rhyming poems, but you know what? You're good at it, so it works for this poem, keeps the rhythm flowing, and makes me swallow your repetition 'cause it goes along with the meter and rhyme. But!
I fell down the stairs one day, and they simply stood and stared.
I asked them if they wouldn't help because they were scared.
The meter here is off! Read it aloud to yourself. If you find yourself tripping up EVER, that means you need to change it. I can't do it on my own. Like, I try to read it aloud, and I can change around emphasis and stuff, but I still can't work it out. The end rhymes are perfect, though. I love the fact that she's asking if they're scared to help her. I think it's one of the most profound moments in the poem, really.
And as I fell they all said,
She's not fine, she is dead.
Hmmm. I like that you switch up the rhythm/meter in this last couplet. It pairs nicely with the fact that you're changing the meaning this time around.
So! After all is said and done, I think this is a nice solid poem. As a matter of personal taste, however, I'd like to see all stanzas have the depth of emotion and exploration of the matter that the words in the "stair" stanza do. The next two are pretty shallow: they didn't even try. I mean, it rhymes and rhymes easily, but betrays itself because it's so shallow. I think that with how unnecessary the "high" is in the first line, you can probably change these two lines completely to find a deeper meaning here.
I think the realization that the others don't care when she's skydiving is cool, but I wonder how exactly she realizes it? I don't know if that can fit in somewhere.
Otherwise, nice job.
PM me if you have any questions!
Good luck and keep writing~
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