Hey there, puffletia!
I'm... really not sure what this is. A Christmas story? Christmas stories are nice, though I notice this wasn't exactly posted during Christmas. However, this also lacks all manner of description. Describe where Santa lives, what he and his wife (he has a wife? O.o) looks like, his elves, and so forth. You may also want to include emotions, what your characters are feeling.
"santa look at the time we are not going to make it all around the globe in time for sunrise" cried the elf.
Santa should be capitalized, and there should be a comma after 'sunrise', because that's what you do in dialogue.
" quick load my seigh we must leave leave now!". santa rushed to get his coat and boots on and dont forget his hat and gloves kissed mrs clause goodbye.
Quick should be capitalized, you don't need a period after that exclamation mark. Also, you don't need 'don't', as you're not addressing the readers directly. Mrs. should be capitalized and there should be a full stop afterwards, because that's how you write 'Mrs.'
All of a sudden the elvf cried out "christmas isnt here yet england isnt crossed of and we still have presents galor!"
Elf is spelled elf, not elvf. Christmas should be capitalized, isn't needs an apostrophe, England should be capitalized.
In short, please read something in English before writing, spell-check, and yeah, avoid writing until you know the bare minimum of what's required.
Hope this helped
~Ita
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