Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this was a sweet little story here...I definitely enjoyed reading this nice little piece here...its a lot of fun to see that pretty funny reveal at the end and its just a pretty relaxing piece to read.
Anyway let's get right to it,
He has black long fluffy hair and his proud of his long tail.
He likes to hunt but actually not so good hunter.
Hmm...well this is a pretty decent start there, definitely building up a bit of mystery about who this is. You're doing a decent job describing this person and the unique skills that he has. Its definitely slowly forming a bit of a picture in the reader's imagination and I think that is the one that you want to create here, let's see where this goes at any rate.
Sometimes people point out that his skill of hunt but he doesn't care about that.
Whatever others think of him, he doesn't mind at all.
Hmm...well adding some personality to this person I see...looks like someone that's very confident in their own abilities and knows not to doubt themselves despite what anyone else might say, and well that seems like a pretty good quality, well as long as its not disregarding other people to the point of it becoming a bad quality that is. There's always a fine line with these things.
On the other hand he has his own troubles.
For example He can't stop check everywhere in his house.
Okay....well the problems you have as a person can also tell you a lot about someone so alright...this should also be some pretty interesting details and well this one certainly is quite an interesting detail that he somehow can't stop checking things in the house. That does add to his personality as well.
He already known where is the bathroom or what kind of things is in food stock case but he can't stop check every day.
Hmm...bathroom and food...well...that's definitely very interesting to see someone that checks those most frequently...I almost this is some kind of animal at this point, cause otherwise it doesn't make too much sense why the bathroom and the food would be the most checked items in the house.
Of cause he never try to stop do that just he think too much hustle sometimes because he has never thought about meaning in his life.
Okay...yeah this is definitely starting to sound more and more like an animal of some sort..well I suppose we will be finding out shortly...or have you left us off on a sort of cliffhanger here...well I guess I will be finding out really soon...
Who is he?
His name is must be Cha-ko.
As you know he doesn't attention to others.
So he is selfish because he is a cat.
Yay!!...my random guess is right....well...that's always fun when you're reading a story where there's a little bit of mystery involved, and well this was quite a nice fun piece here that you've got. Its definitely pretty funny to see that conclusion in the end and its just a fun little story to read.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, it had some issues here and there with grammar and spelling that several people have pointed out already so I didn't go with those...but as a short story...this was a fun read and it manages to be relatively funny with that reveal.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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