In the last line, I think there should be a comma after 'birthday'. I know that's not a major criticism, but I still feel kind of bad about pointing it out, since this poem was so. Very. Meaningful.
Seriously. I don't like saying even small negative things on heartfelt poems like this.
Besides the comma thing, I thought some of the middle lines were a bit too long, considering the shorter lines in the rest of the poem.
What I liked: Well, literally everything else. Lol.
Keep writing!
Points: 31
Reviews: 95
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