I really like this poem. It's sort of frustrating because of the degree of authenticity.
Lust at first sight,
Love doesn't exist here,
We're lying,
We're dangerous,
Like heroin.
No sensible sense,
No conceptual concepts,
I breathe ideas.
Lust at first sight,
Love doesn't exist here,
Desire's the dictator,
We're lazy, so obey.
No honourable honour,
No noble nobility,
Lust at first sight,
Love doesn't exist here,
Clutching at nothing,
Makes us hopeless fools.
Liars of the self,
No trustworthy trust,
No honest honesty,
We are desirable,
We are desired,
We are dangerous.
I really like this poem. It's sort of frustrating because of the degree of authenticity.
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OMG Great poem and you got a perfect! I was surprised to end up giving out a perfect score but it was what it was and what it was was a wonderful perfect poem. I gave it a like and wrote this review! I don't have a favorite line but this is one of my favorite poems for sure! I swear this must have taken a while to write and figure out before you published it because it seams so easy to screw up when you're writing a poem like this one. Especially because I'm a real critique and I don't give a perfect score to just ANY poem I want you to understand how wowed I was! Keep writing for sure because I would like to hear more from you!
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This is a cool poem 
I like the lengths of the lines and the shape of the poem itself.
There is some great use of words and their definitions in the poem. Such as the running theme of taking words like "honesty" apart and making them into "honest" I like the repitition of that style.
overall, it was a very engaging piece with lots of great vocabulary. I enjoyed it.
The last line "We are dangerous" was especially effective as it's very definitive and strong.
This was a really good piece. Keep it up!
Ahoy! This is 567ajt, everyone's favourite dipstick, here to review this poem. You posted three new works yesterday and I reviewed one of them. I think it's time to look at another, and I have chosen this one first. The title, for one, suggests that anyone desirable creates danger and antagonism for characters, on the basis that the characters will get themselves into danger to either be desirable too or to have the desirable.
Lust at first sight,
Love doesn't exist here,
We're lying,
We're dangerous,
Like heroin.
No sensible sense,
No conceptual concepts,
I breathe ideas.
Lust at first sight,
Love doesn't exist here,
Desire's the dictator,
We're lazy, so obey.
No honourable honour,
No noble nobility,
Lust at first sight,
Love doesn't exist here,
Clutching at nothing,
Makes us hopeless fools.
Liars of the self,
No trustworthy trust,
No honest honesty,
We are desirable,
We are desired,
We are dangerous.
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