I absolutely love the introduction. It is really captivating and just makes me want to read more. The use of short sentences is well done and it helps to set the tone. But before you move on to what the main character was doing/thinking, you should establish a setting. Setting will expound on the mood you've created. It is needed to tell your audience what is so interesting about this place.
"roll model" should be "role model". There are a few words like this that are out of place or incorrect that you may want to consider revising.
"I would do anything to see her back to normal again. To see her happy." Again, I like the use of short sentences, but don't overdo it. This statement here could easily be condensed to "I would do anything to see her happy again." Not that it needs it, but the phrase "back to normal again" doesn't sound very literate and in a way it makes your story targeted more for a younger audience.
"Cunctipotens" ...can't say I know how to pronounce this, but it looks cool. Same with this: "Terra Incognita", "Absit Invidia". You've got a great imagination for names, this is definitely one of your strongest points.
"And around every corner we face is something new and inevitably dangerous" I would get rid of the "is" to make it slightly less wordy.
"To entertain myself I chew on a portion of chicle and shave a spear end. Many times I gaze upon the myriad of stars, create new constellations and remember old ones." I love this! The vocabulary is awesome and so nicely put that I can just imagine this scene so vividly in my mind. And the paragraph only gets better. It's so much like you, though...stars, constellations, latin... I love it.
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