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WOW I don't think a review could top yours.

Your way of keeping my attention with the usage of larger words and twisting in every detail about the film is really good. Having Carroll's original and Disney's film version to compare Tim's to is a nice touch. By implying that the newest version still has Carroll's fun and creative Wonderland but also saying it has Tim's dark and mysterious crooked world with it makes this almost sound like what you would find on the back of the DVD case.

Very nice review in my opinion.

Hello tiggpanda145

This review is very impressive. I think your language and sentence structure is just great. It flows very nicely

You made this movie seem amazing, and made me want to see it ( actually, I have seen it, it IS amazing). But i do wish you had pointed just one flaw out, explain why it didn't get five stars.

But I understand that you could only write a review with a certain length, and I feel like you did a great job at making a well-rounded review with so with so few words:) Well done

I like how you compared it to the animated version, and how you described the way the movie interprented the book

Overall, great job. I understand why it was recieved so well Just keep writing

Hi tigg!

So I've never actually reviewed a review of a film, so I'll try my best to give my thoughts. I'll start with what I liked, then talk about what could be improved, then I'll give you a general impression. What I liked is the pacing. At first glance, I thought it was too short, but then after reading it I thought it was a perfect case of quality over quantity. I think the language that you used was very suitable for this sort of thing. Also:

Plummet down a rabbit hole in this bizarre, slightly twisted version of Alice in Wonderland.

Hey tigg! Black here for a short review day review! (Note here: I have watched this movie and plan to try to give you a detailed review on your overall idea/ theme, the nature of a review, and less than on your baser writing skills such as grammar, dialogue, and description - anyway, it looks like Hannah already took care of that!).

Okay, so you did a good job on your grammar and style. Your writing made a usually boring genre quite easy to read, and I was able to get through it quickly. However, I get a feeling that this isn't really a movie review at all. To me (noting here that I don't know the official definition of a review) this isn't a review at all. Maybe a blurb for the movie . . . possibly an introduction. Possibly a summary. But I wouldn't call it a review.

Reviews usually tend to criticize/ praise some piece of work. They re-view it. They state opinions! Like this one! But they don't summarize. They do not make blurbs! Read this . . . it states (through your style) your personal opinion, but it shows it as a sort of, well, blurb. You need to A: Not define it as a review! Or B: Re-write it AS a review! A review tends to state an opinion about something . . . usually.

Okay, so next thing! You use a practically insane number of comma's that are diluting your point/ blurb. They're just killing it . . . sorry, had to tell you. Cut down on them, make your sentences more smooth and impacting (if you're writing a REVIEW then it's usually very essential to do this!). Impact, action, and personalness really help to keep a person reading your review . . . well, reading it (they are, sadly, my weak points As you may see).

Anyway, my personal thoughts on Alice in Wonderland (the new version obviously) are 'bleh'. No, it's not a bad movie. Yeah, it has some cool characters. Yeah, it's kinda fast paced and fun. Yeah, it's got really cool graphics. What's wrong with it for me though is that it really just leaves me empty. There was nothing to it! It conveyed NO information, no theme, no central idea! For me that doesn't really work. Yeah, it CAN be a good movie still, but it has to have an IMPACT to make an impression!

Anyway! As I said, this would be a VERY short review, and I must now be moving on . . . Good work, good style, good grammar! For a blurb/ introduction this was really nicely done, having a good personal touch which kept it interesting. If I read this on some advertisement for a movie I'd probably be impressed enough to go and watch that movie! Good work! Remember - Keep writing - Guaranteed improvement!


~Black~

Hello! Iggy here to review.

[...]this enthralling adventure of an impetuous 19 year old, whose destiny it is to slay the dreaded Jabberwocky[...]

Burton’s spin on Carroll’s ‘Alice in Wonderland’ was incredible; the best film version yet!

Plummet down a rabbit hole

Hey, Tigg. Congratulations on the award! This is a pretty tight piece, so it's no wonder you were recognized.

In light of that, I'm just going to take this review to point out some places where this could be perhaps expanded, bring out more of an ANGLE to the review rather than just presenting facts in a solid, grammatically correct fashion.

My first question is here:

Burton’s dark and quirky themes are evident throughout the film and enhance the entertainment.

with good use of scenery and character portrayal with Depp’s Mad Hatter having a particularly edgy feel.

but another Disney classic all the same.

The highlights for me are the gripping story line, the scenery, the music and The Mad Hatter of course!