First things first. Anything with an apocalyptic storyline is already a 10. You broke that scale and made it an 11. This story is very well written. I was very entertained by it. One quick critique though. You used seemed a little too much in three sentences, one right after the other. This is a common mistake. When you go back and preview it, try and think of other words you could use. It will make more and more readers interested and leave them on the edge of their seats for more.
Keep up your amazing work. I hope to see a lot more from you.
Points: 1117
Reviews: 74
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