This is scary. I thought this was awesome, but maybe you could have included a bit more feelings during or before the countdown?
Maybe something like: "I see a foot slowly lifting, and my fears ease like tears often dissolve on my skin. I see the scars on my foot, which reflect to my bitter past. I nod. This was right. One jump, that was all."
Maybe a bit more detail just before you jump or something.
This was just an idea...
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