Amusement

Hey Salman! I was browsing through the Green Room when I came across this, and so I thought I'd come check it out and review it for you

Once upon a time there was this little boy who had only one dream,to ride a horse.

You may have done this on purpose, but I have a bit of a pet hate for stories that begin with 'Once upon a time' because it's a very big cliche, which makes it a little overused. I would maybe consider removing or replacing it (even to something as siple as 'There was once this little boy...'), but hey, it's your call

He was amused by the idea of it. Cold winds passing by and the feeling that you are the fastest. He was the son of a tailor. His father was amused by clothes. Beautiful clothes,colorful with a variety of embroidery.

I like the idea you have here and I can see that you've had a nice stab at creating imagery. Nonetheless, I really think you can expand on that and make the imagery more detailed, and perhaps make it stand out more.

The father and the son never understood each other.

I've quoted this as I want to note something very important: showing instead of telling. You'd be surprised at how much more thrilling a story is when you show the reader things rather than just tell them things. Don't just tell us the father and son never understood each other, that's easy! Make us lazy readers do some work by not giving everything away, but showing us signs of how the father and son never understood each other.

The son replied.Again with an emotion less face.

I'd suggest for you to replace that first full stop with a comma

The boy used to visit stables and race courses. He envied the jockeys and all the other people that had the luxury of riding such a fine creature.

Horses with their strong legs and angry faces

Your use of the word 'angry' here bothers me a little. In the previous paragraph, you refer to the horses as 'fine creatures', and when someone views something in such a positive light, negative words such as 'angry' do seem a bit odd. I mean, to most people anger is a bad thing, yet you portray the horses positively so it's a bit of a mismatch adjective for me.

He entered a stable in the dark stole a horse.

You're missing an 'and' between 'dark' and 'stole'

The horses were pretty well trained e so it was easy for the boy to climb the horse and just go out into the open fields and enjoy the unthinkable.

You've got a little typo between 'trained' and 'so'

He climbed up kicked the creature and he started to run.

You need a comma after 'climbed up'

Slowly step by step the horse started gaining speed. The boy felt that he was running and not the horse. The boy thought he could beat the world. It was not like he imagined. It was even better! The world surrounding him started to blur. The horse gained more and more speed. After a minute or two the boy realised that horse is out of control.He saw people stopping horses but seeing and doing are two different things. So he jumped of the horse and broke his leg. He did not even feel the pain. He was just over joyed. He felt like the king of the world. His father, police and many others found him later lying on the grass field laughing. He laughed all the way to the hospital and all the night that was to come. The only thing on his mind was when will he get a chance to ride a horse again. He recovered in a month and was allowed to go home. When he reached home he was not able to believe his eyes. His tailor father bought him a horse. A beautiful white young one!

I think this paragraph would benefit being cut into several ones. A lot of dramatic things happen such as the horse being out of control and the boy breaking his leg, and I think such dramatic situations have far greater impact if they're more spaced out compared to one chunk

Overall

Okay, so I think this is a nice little piece of writing you've got here. Nothing too serious and pretty simple too, but I actually really like the simplicity of it. So many writers feel the need to create incredibly complicated plots with complicated characters and complicated events e.t.c. so I find it really lovely sometimes to read something like this that goes for the simpler side of things, and when done well, simple can be just as effective as complicated. Sometimes it can be even better! Overall, a nice read with lots of potential

In terms of critiques, I do have a few things to mention that could hopefully improve this even further. The first thing I want to mention is only small, but it's about grammar and punctuation. Basically, I noticed that you don't tend to use spaces after commas, question marks, speech marks e.t.c. It might just be a copy and paste error, but if it's not, remember that you must always leave a space after punctuation marks like that. Otherwise in terms of grammar, you're pretty much doing good. There are a few hiccups here and there, but definitely nothing worth stressing over.

As for content, while I do really like the simplicity of this, I can't help thinking that more details and more imagery would work a charm. You've got snippets of them sprinkled around the piece, but I definitely think you can take it even further. Take the last paragraph, for example. It involves lots and lots of events such as the boy falling off the horse, him going to hospital, him getting a horse e.t.c. but it's all squeezed into that one paragraph. These events are probably the main ones too because they're what moves on with the story, and so as a result I can't help feeling that spacing them out and elegantly throwing more detail into them is a really good idea. This sort of fits in with what I said about showing rather than telling too actually.

Basically, don't just say that the boy fell off the horse and broke his leg, describe how he fell off, describe how hard he hit the ground, describe the sound of the bone breaking, describe the horse then galloping off like a madman e.t.c. The same goes for the other things, describe how he 'captured' the horse and mounted it, describe some of his time in hospital maybe. Do you sort of see what I'm trying to say? I'm not the best at making sense, so if you are a little confused, just pick my brain further after you read this.

The only other thing I want to mention is about the plot itself, primarily towards the end. Maybe this is just my maternal instinct (not that I have a child, but y'get me), but I find it a bit strange that the father would so willingly get his son a horse when he's just spent time in hospital because of a horse, particularly falling off one. I understand that the idea is that the father realised how much horses and riding horses meant to the son, but it still does seem odd to me... If you'd mentioned the father buying his son lessons before the boy actually got on his own horse, I'd be a bit more understanding, but as it stands it does seem a little unrealistic. That's more of an opinionated critique though, so I won't pressure you to change that, but I do think you should consider it.

Well, I think that's it! I hope I've managed to help you, even a little bit. I haven't reviewed a thing since last September, so I do apologise if I don't make much sense or if this doesn't help you much. I'm just a tad rusty is all! If there is anything I've said that you want clearing up though, don't hesitate to question me and pick my brain, I'm here to help after all!

Keep writing,

xoxo Skins