rubbish.
...Rubbish. Well. Be that way.
Words appear to me,
connotated smiles,
Connotated is spelled correctly, but is perhaps poor diction. The words connote smiles. I would choose connoting over connotated for clarity/simplicity. Shorter, better word.
clashing with scripted frowns,
all disguised under
translucent
ink.
Smiles belie frowns in words of ink.
Depth? Mmh. One is frowned upon (by social obligation), but mocked by lip twitches to the tune of smiles - words are a refuge, and a reason to be excluded. Both problem and solution.
In short, it is excellent for what it is. At length, it feels like a topic that could be expanded into more.
That's all I got for "rubbish.," but I never thought dumpster diving could be so provocative.
Be forever hortatory,
~Skorlir
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