Thanks both for welcoming me and taking the time to comment!!
There is no rhyme scheme, I write free form. My poems are more about the meaning then the way it is written. I am conscious it doesn't has much rhythm. I might try in the future to work with rhythm a little bit more but it will never have a logical rhyme scheme because that's not what I would like to write at this moment. But who knows in which direction it will go.
Sometimes a rhyme might slip in unconsciously.
The subject of the poem: I like to have people think or make there own imaginary with the poem. If I explain too much in the poem itself, in my opinion it will loose his power. But this time I will explain just so the context is more clear.
I am not here for myself:
I am not on this world for only myself. I am here for other people to find peace in me or for them to build from out what I have giving them (even when they are out of my life now). Who I helped or will help even when I have to suffer for it.
A small part of the chain:
We are all a small part of the world, the world being the chain we all are in/on and I play the part of being a guide in this chain.
The part that will guide you
Guide you to a better self
It is causing me pain
But I'm ok with that.
I will be there for you.....:
I play the part of guiding someone who I loved without knowing at the time I was guiding. It is causing me pain knowing I was only guiding this person into a better direction and I wasn't the goal. But I helped her come closer to her goal. Which is a different lover, but without me she wouldn't have known what she was looking for. I'm OK with that, because I know in the end, for her, this is good. And still, I will be there for her, always, no matter what.
Everybody has their own thoughts about this poem, and that's what also gives it power, but I agree with you, Pen. If it's too vague it leaves too much for guessing what it's about. Thanks!! And shady, thanks for saying to me my poem has no rhythm I will work on it, and experiment a little bit!
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