Hello, DarkPandemonium,
So I must say I really enjoyed this song because I've thought these thoughts so much but never really knew how to word them. I think that it's really relatable because its really true the ideas you put across in these lyrics. I really like some individual- well done!
Now onto critiques, I think that your wording is a bit boring and obvious and it just doesn't seem that interesting or different. To do this I think you could add some different metaphors to put your ideas across without blaintently saying it.
Also I didn't particularly like the structure as I think it needed some mixing up so it would be a bit different, considering your wording is kind of obvious. I can imagine this being played with music though and other lyrics won't seem as obvious but still, I think when talking about such a well known topic you could change it up a bit.
you say you're 'indie' when you're just the same
I always say this! 'Indie' people think they're different because they're not following the crowd but in fact they are just following another one!
Anyways I hope this review helped. PM me with any questions or if you want anything else reviewed.
Keep writing!
-Arc
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