Reorient

by ChipsMcCoy

Published July 22, 2014

Change.

Change. 

Change can be good sometimes. 

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deletedaug23
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deletedaug23 wrote a review Review · Jul 27, 2014

Hey, yo, Chips Ahoy McCoy! Strangelove here on this PokeReview Day and I have a quick review for you!
If I am one person to say, you do enjoy avant-garde poetry. Well, not avant-garde but it sure is odd. You often rely on a couple of words and a simple punchline. There was no punchline in this, so it's nice to switch some things up. Let me get onto the good stuff first.
You rely on change, which I like. You manage to keep it something we can relate to and it's simple. We all want change, and change would be good for some reason. This is also short, which is a knack you seem to have most of the time.
I didn't really get the jist of it. It seems like it had potential, but just wasn't there. I'm sorry, but this wasn't really there for me.
Good job,
Keep writing,
Stay groovy, my friend.

#TeamPlasmaStruck

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erilea
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erilea wrote a review Review · Jul 27, 2014

Haha, this really fits with the first line. It shows the last line different front everything else. I don't know if you meant to, but that was a good use of it.

Apart from this being a total awesomeness opus, I think you will regret being beaten, and I hope Team Aqua is going down! I really want my team to win. I want to crush Team Aqua.

Right now, I want you to write longer pieces.

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Corncob
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Corncob commented Comment · Jul 23, 2014

*Oracle lands on ground dramatically.*
I prophesize that this will become featured in the next 24 hours.
*Flies off. Hits cloud. Wait, that's not possible. Hits airplane. Keeps flying.*
Adios! (is Hispanic Oracle. Yes, it's possible.)

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Cithara
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Cithara commented Comment · Jul 22, 2014

Great poem!
Not gonna review it because its perfectly fine and really well written! :D
I don't know if you read my poem "Change?" but it feels like your answering the question my poem posed ;)
Keep up the good work!

Thank you ;)

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wtppowers
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wtppowers wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2014

Hey, Chips! It's another fun and exciting review from the one and only Mr. Powers here! Today, I'm going to be looking at your extremely puzzling thing here, entitles "Reorient".

For those of you who don't know, Reorient means to "change the focus or direction of". This definitely changes the direction of my mind. I was expecting a long poem here, but I was wrong.

I don't want to say that you wasted points, because you didn't. What you wrote is extremely moving, though extremely simple. You could have written a long, elaborate poem about change. But instead, you simply wrote that change can be good. Overall, I've heard more simple messages move people to tears, so you're in luck.

I've seen something like this before here on the YWS site, in which someone infamously wrote "Awesome... Awesome to the max." But then again, am I surprised? No. Because it looks like you write short stuff for a living.

In the end, this gets a positive review from me. Good luck!

Thanks Mr. Powers XD

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EmeraldEyes
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EmeraldEyes wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2014

Heggo.

Another one of your works.
I don't decide to like them before I read them, but I did this time because it was another one I was around for when the creation bug struck! :D
*giggles*

Change.

Change.

Change can be good sometimes.


Since this was born in conversation, I completely understand what message you are communicating here, it is simple and effective; and I applaud the fact that your works are usually so short.
It's so snappy and just straight to the point.

Keep writing.
*huggles*



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