Young Writers Society

an attempt at a new style of poetry.


bleed me blue


opium bleeds me blue

so blue.

did you feel

it’s raining snowy splinters of glass?

this has shaken us so hard

so hard.



aglow

the little veins are aglow

and the markings left

prickle and shine.



opium bleeds me blue

so blue,

in the flickering lamplight

i see you, so blue.

did you know

the winter snow is on us

now.



touch, your fiery touch

so like the blazinghotwhitescauldingbreath

instantaneous repercussions.



aglow

i am aglow

i see the splinters left

by shattered sun shards.


bleed me, bleed me

blue

I like this, its different. I think it should be under alternative poetry.
Very simple, but is full of imagery. I like the repitition.

Ooh opium....

Yeah um. Actually I really like the way it flowed. At first i thought it wouldn't flow properly, just be one of those poems you read aloud slowly but dramatically and everyone goes "Man, that's deep." But it actually goes quite well. Good imagery, good use of words, cool layout.

The new style works- it flows nicely and was intriguing as well. Nice job.

I really, really liked this. I think it flowed really well. It seems like something that someone would read in a jam poetry session. It's great, good job.